Boot Camp of Valhalla: Kobolds of Idona Keep (Reworking)

[MegaSilver]

In Warrior Devotion, the second line should start with: "While that Master is in play,...."


IMO, Avenge the Master should read: "while... destroyed" instead of "when... destroyed."

[johnny139]

First post should be updated with the correct text.

[DanieLoche]

Originally Posted by johnny139

Yes, definitely supposed to be one or the other. We'll need an art update if DanieLoche is watching. Help with Wurdz is a good suggestion once that's done with...

And I'd absolutely love another test, if we have any volunteers. Not really an option for me in the near future.

I'm here.
If the text in the OP is updated, I'll change the card today.

[johnny139]

Text should be good to go.

[DanieLoche]

Updated card :

[johnny139]

Dad_Scaper's advice on the wording is HERE. This sort of stuff is a bit beyond my ken, so what are we thinking change-wise?

[Dad_Scaper]

Please bear in mind that my edits are intended to improve the written word. I'm not (that) concerned about how "official" language is. I just want words to be spelled and used correctly, and all the i's dotted and the t's crossed.

Thanks for sharing your excellent custom with me. I hope I was able to help, particularly with the "Avenge the Master" wording.

[superfrog]

Avenge the Master definitely looks better with D_S's words. With that, it is definitely tight enough for an SoV submission, imo.

[Lazy Orang]

What happens now, then? Throw our submission into the ring and then get started on nominating figures for our next unit?

Btw, I'd probably be able to write a bio up for these guys at some stage, if anyone were interested and no one else wanted to take it. (Might not have time - if I don't, I'll say.) I haven't been following the thread for a while, so a quick overview of what was chosen for their theme would be appreciated if that were the case.

[flameslayer93]

As for the bio, some wrote a nice poem up quite a long time ago.

[Lazy Orang]

Cool! Good to know you have something.

[Maklar the Silver Prince]

Originally Posted by superfrog

Avenge the Master definitely looks better with D_S's words. With that, it is definitely tight enough for an SoV submission, imo.

I agree with this completely.

Originally Posted by Lazy Orang

What happens now, then? Throw our submission into the ring and then get started on nominating figures for our next unit?

Btw, I'd probably be able to write a bio up for these guys at some stage, if anyone were interested and no one else wanted to take it. (Might not have time - if I don't, I'll say.) I haven't been following the thread for a while, so a quick overview of what was chosen for their theme would be appreciated if that were the case.

I believe the idea for the bio was to send them all to @johnny139 and then have a vote for the one we liked the best. I did write one, but I can't remember if I sent it in or not. It definitely wasn't as good as that poem we had.

As for the process... I would be in favor of submitting and then beginning a new unit, but if you really wanted to know, you should ask @Lyrgard about it.