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Re: The Book of Batwoman
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life's short, why not make an impact on the world? make some peoples lives better, have a few good laughs, and then when it's all over go out with BANG! |
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Fixed some grammatical issues:
Once a soldier, always a soldier. The daughter of a respected United States Colonel, Kate Kane spent her entire life fighting, especially after the tragic loss of her mother and twin sister. After being kicked out of the United States Military Academy for refusing to comply with the Don't Ask Don't Tell policy, Kate returned to Gotham City and lived somewhat aimlessly until a chance meeting with Batman and the sight of the Bat-Signal inspired her. Using her training and stolen military technology, Kate became Batwoman. She had found a new fight in the war against crime and corruption. |
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Yeah, but that leaves out any direct mention of
a) her sexuality b) what the Don't Ask Don't Tell policy actually was; since people in the future might not be familiar with the rule c)Kate's option to return to the military and her choice of the cowl over the armed forces, which I feel shows a lot of her character in and of itself Besides, I don't see what grammatical errors you mean. Grammarly said my post was fine, and all my commas were used properly, so what's the deal? life's short, why not make an impact on the world? make some peoples lives better, have a few good laughs, and then when it's all over go out with BANG! |
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life's short, why not make an impact on the world? make some peoples lives better, have a few good laughs, and then when it's all over go out with BANG! |
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There's a bunch of partial sentences in what you wrote. How's this?
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Blue) I feel like this small change subtly adds to the idea that she quit out of a sense of integrity. Red) I feel like it helps it flow better. It separates the meeting of Batman as its own event, and it paints a very cinematic picture of the moment that she became inspired to become Batwoman. It gives it the feel of a cohesive journey, and it particularly makes me think of this page from Batwoman Elegy of Batman swinging off into the night with her standing there after... You know what, I'm just going to link the page since it's kinda cool.
Spoiler Alert!
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life's short, why not make an impact on the world? make some peoples lives better, have a few good laughs, and then when it's all over go out with BANG! Last edited by quozl; April 25th, 2017 at 11:22 AM. Reason: mistake! |
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I prefered this wording...
After being kicked out of the United States Military Academy for refusing to lie, under the Don't Ask Don't Tell policy, about her sexuality. Rather than the "she was actually a lesbian" part. I actually think this is about as neutral as we can be and still cover "the facts"* Quote:
*well as factual as you can get about a fictional character. Would I want it to be everything I love...sure...but that's just not realistic so I'm going to focus on finding things that will make me unhappy and work on fixing those. |
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It probably is, but I was already editing. I didn't think it would hurt. I do like the "her sexuality" wording better though.
life's short, why not make an impact on the world? make some peoples lives better, have a few good laughs, and then when it's all over go out with BANG! |
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Alright, we're starting to get too much of a 'written by committee' feel here. Taking some of the suggestions above and re-working the original a little, how about:
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".... the Cambridge ladies do not care, above Cambridge if sometimes in its box of sky lavender and cornerless, the moon rattles like a fragment of angry candy" |
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