The Book of Atom Eve

[Scapemage]

Interesting marker movement going on now. It reads quite complicated but I don't think it will play poorly. Yea.

[Lord Pyre]

1. Are the character’s name and secret identity listed in a consistent format with the rest of the project? If the character shares a name and/or secret identity with another character is it properly clear whether or not they are the same character?
PASS

2. Consider the listed Species. Are the design’s power level, point level, and statistics (life, move, range, attack, and defense numbers) within the established range for that species? If it’s an outlier, is there thematic justification for this?
PASS

3. Consider the listed Uniqueness. Does the power text properly reflect whether the figure is a Hero or a squad, and whether it is Event, Unique, Uncommon, or common? If it’s Event, are the powers written with consideration for Event Hero rules? If it’s Uncommon, are the powers written to avoid stacking? If it’s common, are the powers written with this in mind?
PASS

4. Consider the Class and Personality. For each, is it a reuse? If so, is the character thematically consistent with other members of that Class or Personality? If not, is there a preexisting Class or Personality that would fit as well that could be used instead? Are there any existing synergies with that Class or Personality that are undesirable or that this Design would create that would be undesirable for preexisting members of that Class or Personality?
PASS

5. Consider the listed Size. If the figure is double based, is it Large or Huge? Is the chosen miniature’s physical size consistent with other miniatures in the chosen size category?
PASS

6. Consider the listed Height. If you stack hexes up next to the figure, does the number listed for the height match up the layers of stacked hexes that match the miniature’s physical height?
Consider the listed Life number. Is this number consistent with other figures of the same species?
PASS

7. Consider the listed Move number. Is this number consistent with other figures of that power level?
PASS

8. Consider the listed Range and Attack numbers. Is this number consistent with other figures that use the same type of weapon or power to attack?
PASS

9. Consider the listed Defense number. Is this number consistent with other figures of the same or similar species and with the same or similar armor or other defensive equipment?
PASS

10. Does the figure have Super Strength? If it does or doesn’t, was this determined on the standard of that character demonstrating three things: A. The ability to throw a car B. The ability to survive a fall from a tall building and C. The ability to knock back another person when punching them?
N/A

11. Examine all of the special powers. Are there other powers that fit the same theme already in existence in the project? If so, can they be reused? If they can’t, can those other powers be used as a basis for the mechanics and wording?
Not sure of any other molecule transmutation powers, PASS

12. Examine any movement powers. Do they keep the figure’s speed consistent with other figures of their species and power level?
Examine any offensive powers. Do they keep the figure’s offensive potential consistent with other figures with the same powers and power levels or skills and weaponry?
N/A

13. Examine any defensive, healing, or other tanking powers. Do they keep the figure’s survivability consistent with other figures of the same powers or power level or species and armor class?
Raelin is still probably better, PASS

14. Examine any leadership powers. Do they exceed the activation potential of the best existing leaders? If so, is there thematic justification for this?
N/A

15. Consider any powers that reference darkness, electrical, figure movement, fire, gas, ice, kryptonite, light/sensory, magical, poison, psychic, stealth, or water-based abilities. Do these behave in similar ways to other powers of this type, including mentions of immunities?
Is it clear for all special powers what phase of the turn and how they are triggered, what phase of the turn they are active in, and when and how they cease being active?
PASS

16. Are special powers listed in game, round, and turn order?
Probably not.

17. If a special power includes a D20 roll, does it make sense to list a number by the title?
Since it's probably not going to be reused, I don't think it's necessary?

18. If a power is being reused, are the title and wording copied accurately?
N/A

19. Has the power title or a very similar one been used before with vastly different mechanics?
She can change vegetables into cheeseburgers. Who else can do that?

[IAmBatman]

Just fix that #16.

[quozl]

#17 is always necessary.

[Lord Pyre]

Originally Posted by IAmBatman

Just fix that #16.

I think it's proper now. Maybe..?

Originally Posted by quozl

#17 is always necessary.

Doesn't bother me either way. Gotcha.

[IAmBatman]

Not sure where the current version is. You should put it in the SP, though, for sure!

[Lord Pyre]

Originally Posted by IAmBatman

Not sure where the current version is. You should put it in the SP, though, for sure!

Gotcha sorry!

[IAmBatman]

The order of the powers looks good and flows logically as well.

[Ronin]

Omni-Man is probably a better value, but I don't agree at all that Invincible is bad. I do think his value fluctuates a bit from map to map, depending on how easy it is to set up his SA.

Originally Posted by Lord Pyre

Even then, considering her main teammates are beatsticks, I'd rather just keep up the damage than remove one of those.

If we change it this way, the removal becomes more appealing. I'm also considering giving her 3 markers, so she can "charge" her defense when enemies aren't around. Then we can scrap her resurrection completely.

Also limited the lowered defense to normal attacks slightly favors Invincible over Omni-Man, since Omni-Man nearly always uses his special attack.

Other thoughts?

I think letting it work with specials would actually be more helpful to Invincible. His SA is his big flashy attack. Whenever I play Invincible, I'm hoping to set that up.

Omni-Man's SA is nice, but it's a multi-hit thing and Atom Eve's boost is a one-shot deal that's only good for the first hit of it. I don't think boosting part of his SA is so scary that we should cut off her ability to help out Invincible's big design hook.

Plus, I mean... Omni-Man is the outright better normal attacker of the two. If you can only get one marker on an opponent's card at a time (which is the case as I'm reading it), then you want your shot at attacking them with reduced defense to be a big one. Normals only doesn't feel like it's really doing Mark any favors, to me.

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Anywho, I'm a little confused about the marker mechanics in the new version.

MOLECULAR SHIELD
Atom Eve starts the game with a Pink Molecular Alteration marker on this card. If Atom Eve or any friendly figure adjacent to her is attacked, you may remove 1 Matter Manipulation marker and add 1 automatic shield to whatever is rolled. Atom Eve may not have more than 3 Matter Manipulation markers on this card.

Marker changes name mid power here, and I'm not sure the marker maximum makes sense here, but that's relatively minor stuff. My big question is about the bold part.

Are you removing the marker from the defending figure's card, or from Atom Eve's card, regardless of who's defending? It's not clear, because her second power lets her put markers on allies' cards.

I do think the second power also needs clarified as far as whether or not there's a limit to how many MM Markers she can put an another figure's card. The third power implies the limit is one, but that isn't stated.

[Lord Pyre]

Fixed the copy/paste error and clarified! How's this look?

MOLECULAR SHIELD
Atom Eve starts the game with a Pink Matter Manipulation marker on this card. If Atom Eve or any friendly figure adjacent to her is attacked, you may remove 1 Matter Manipulation marker and add 1 automatic shield to whatever is rolled. Atom Eve may not have more than 3 Matter Manipulation markers on this card.

MATTER MANIPULATION 11
After moving and before attacking with Atom Eve or an adjacent Viltrumite, you may roll the 20-sided die. On a roll of 11 or higher, you may remove one marker other than an Order Marker from Atom Eve's or any figure's card within 4 clear sight spaces of Atom Eve, or you may add a Matter Manipulation marker to Atom Eve's card or any opponent's figure's card within 4 clear sight spaces of Atom Eve.

ATOMIC ALTERATION
Opponent's figures with a Matter Manipulation marker on their card roll 1 fewer defense die when defending against attacks from figures you control. After that opponent's figure rolls defense dice, remove all Matter Manipulation markers from it's card.

So technically this allows for opponent's to have more markers, but it's pointless since they all go away. I could just say there's a limit, but this way it saves on text.

Also allies shouldn't get the markers, just Eve and enemies, so that's clarified.

If this approach is still confusing, we could just split her powers even more and have two different types of markers. I just thought this would be more elegant. I believe that this design WORKS simply, it's just hard to word.

[MrNobody]

Minor nitpick, but Matter Manipulation is already a power on Sersi.

[Lord Pyre]

Originally Posted by MrNobody

Minor nitpick, but Matter Manipulation is already a power on Sersi.

Dagnabbit, I wanted most of this card to be an alliteration.

Has Transmutation been used?