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The promise
Hi! I'm new here, but wanted to share this FanFic I wrote. Tell me what you think, and thanks for reading.
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Welcome and well done.
I look forward to your next tale. A cloud can change its semblance, yet retain its will With the intimacy of destruction, One knows what it is to be alive The empty sky holds no reflection, for sorrow - Eslo Rudkey |
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Wow. You have quite a gift for words. Your descriptions are vivid, but more than that, they are original. The comparisons force the reader to notice them and actually think about them, because they are something he hasn't heard before.
You also portrayed Raelin very well, I thought. You did a good job of capturing her emotions, especially with the length you had to work with. There were a few missing letters here and there that confused me a bit, as well as some grammatical stuff, such as: Quote:
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Overall, however, a very, very excellent read. Your grammar is flawless save for that last bit near the end. Your style of writing overall is very engaging and grabs the reader's interest very well. Your descriptions are outstanding. I'd say they are the best I've seen in this forum. I definitely look forward to anything else you have to contribute in the future. Well done! ~TGRF. P.S. And also, welcome to the site and the forum! Nice to have you! |
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I was also curious what an ombre could be.
You should try your hand at the Fan Fic contest elsinora. A cloud can change its semblance, yet retain its will With the intimacy of destruction, One knows what it is to be alive The empty sky holds no reflection, for sorrow - Eslo Rudkey |
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~TGRF. |
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Bravo! Great read, very engaging and very entertaining. Keep up the good writing.
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"I'll say it one last time; be brave." Veronica Roth I have a thing for quotes... Read my Fanfic! http://www.heroscapers.com/community...ad.php?t=50148 |