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[caps]

Regarding your healer: "heal x wounds" should be "remove x wound markers." Also, it should be an uncommon hero (since it has more than 1 life) and Inner Fire is way Overpowered in my opinion. I like the rest of it though.

You could word Dispel Magic so that any negative markers (other than wound markers) could be removed from friendly figures, and enemy figures... I'm not sure what to do about enemy figures.

By the way, I like the ideas behind your pieces.

[William099]

Originally Posted by capsocrates

Regarding your healer: "heal x wounds" should be "remove x wound markers." Also, it should be an uncommon hero (since it has more than 1 life) and Inner Fire is way Overpowered in my opinion. I like the rest of it though.

You could word Dispel Magic so that any negative markers (other than wound markers) could be removed from friendly figures, and enemy figures... I'm not sure what to do about enemy figures.

By the way, I like the ideas behind your pieces.

Thank you for your input!! Didn't know that common heroes could only have one life. What would you do with the Inner Fire ability to make it more fair?

[William099]

Originally Posted by AMIS

Used properly Rorshack should be good at 120. I really like this one.

On the Knights of Lordearon it should be 'ignore all wounds' not 'ignore al wounds'. Although I'm sure Al appreciates the card.

The Phoenix taking a turn immediately after being summoned should be on the Phoenix card not the Kael'Thas card.

I would try to combine the Arthas cards. The have very similar powers so perhaps give him the "Sir Hawthorne" effect where he may switch sides during a battle.

Good work.

Unfortunately I don't think they do I ordered a Kael'thas and he is way too big... thus why I have had to proxy with actual heroscape figures.

[William099]

Added the Warforged Infiltrators.

[William099]

New changes made to the Warforged Infiltrators.

[William099]

Added Saint Patrick... thoughts?

[William099]

Originally Posted by William099

Added Saint Patrick... thoughts?

NEVER MIND!!

[awesomeunleashed]

At your request, here I am with wording feedback. First off, you should look at my Special Powers C&P Text for official wording. Here's what I suggest for the wording of several of your powers, changes in bold.

Shield Bash Special Attack
Range 1. Attack 4.
If a small, medium, or large figure receives one or more wounds from Shield Bash Special Attack, you must, if possible, move it 1 space. A figure moved by Shield Bash Special Attack never takes any leaving engagement attacks. A non-flying figure moved lower by Shield Bash Special Attack can receive any falling damage that may apply.
I'm afraid I got rid of the different size and "away from" things. If you really want them, I could try, but I'm guessing it would be so long that you would have to get rid of Sharp Spines.

Dead Zone:
If this Hunter is engaged, it may not attack with its normal attack.

Animal Bonding
There are no "Animals" in Heroscape...

Lightning Bolt Special Attack
Range 5. Attack 3.
If Watcher inflicts at least one wound with Lightning Bolt Special Attack, he may attack the defending figure two additional times with Lightning Bolt Special Attack.

Phoenix: You gave it bonding with Kurrok and Arrow Gruts? I can't fix Rebirth, it's too messy. I would find some other way to do it with an official precedent.

Animal War Training
When a Knight of Lordaeron you control is attacked by a non-adjacent figure and at least 1 skull is rolled, roll the 20-sided die. If you roll a 14 or higher, ignore all damage that would be inflicted by the attack.

I'll edit this later, gotta go now.

[William099]

Thanks a bunch for the suggestions! I will definitely look at your thread... I got the animal bonding because the HOF custom project had some animal customs... are they not an official custom project?

[awesomeunleashed]

Originally Posted by William099

Thanks a bunch for the suggestions! I will definitely look at your thread... I got the animal bonding because the HOF custom project had some animal customs... are they not an official custom project?

I don't know what you mean by "official", but I didn't know you were combining with other customs. With the current wording of Animal Bonding, only figures with the name, class, or species as "Animal" will count. I don't know who you want him to bond with, but if it doesn't have "Animal" on the card somewhere, it doesn't count.
Anyway, here are some more suggestions:

Flame Strike Special Attack
Range 4. Attack 5.
Choose a figure to attack. You may also choose up to three other figures adjacent to the targeted figure to be affected by Flame Strike Special Attack. Roll attack dice once for all affected figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately. Figures with the Lava Resistant special power are not affected by Flame Strike Special Attack.

Banish
I would leave this out. As a general rule, you should give a figure no more than 3 powers, and I think it makes his Phoenixes too powerful. Also, without a marker or anything, there is way too much bookkeeping. If you insist on having it, I would change this:
Instead of attacking, you may choose...

Blizzard Special Attack
Attack 4. Range 4.
Choose a figure to attack. Any figures adjacent to the chosen figure are also affected by the Blizzard Special Attack. Jaina Proudmoore only needs a clear sight shot at the chosen figure. Roll attack dice once for all affected figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately. Jaina Proudmoore cannot be affected by her own Blizzard Special Attack.
Really? How could you get the wording wrong on a power that is exactly the same as several official powers?

Summon Water Elemental
You need to make a decision here. Because taking a turn during someone else's turn is not good, you must either make it after her turn with a max of one Elemental summoned, like this:

After taking a turn with Jaina Proudmoore, you may roll the 20-sided die. If you roll an 11 or higher, you may, if possible, place one of your previously destroyed Water Elementals on an empty space within 3 clear sight spaces of Jaina Proudmoore. You may then immediately take a turn with the summoned Water Elemental.

Or, instead of attacking with 3 tries, but no turn:

Instead of attacking, you may roll the 20-sided die. If you roll an 11 or higher, you may, if possible, place one of your previously destroyed Water Elementals on an empty space within 3 clear sight spaces of Jaina Proudmoore. After you use Summon Water Elemental once, you may use Summon Water Elemental two additional times.

Mass Teleport
...If you roll a 19 or higher,...

Arthas (both versions) does too many things. I would get rid of the insanely un-official Divine Shield (maybe up his defense by 1?), Death Pact, and that random sentence on the evil Arthas's card. They can't be in the same army anyway, for the same reason you can't have both Raelins. I won't go through the rest of the powers completely, but here are some fixes:
On a roll of If you roll a
Undead, as a Species, should be capitalized
Devotion/Unholy Aura: Friendly units figures
Power names should be in all caps
Storm Bolt and Thunder Clap need to say Special Attack, Damage should be changed to Attack
So, why does Long Rifles have a range boost? If I understand this correctly, if they are attacking a figure not adjacent to them, they get another range? Why don't they just have a 7 range?

Some of this is just my opinion, so you can ignore it if you want. I'm just trying to help you get more official-looking cards.

[William099]

Spoiler Alert!

Originally Posted by awesomeunleashed

I don't know what you mean by "official", but I didn't know you were combining with other customs. With the current wording of Animal Bonding, only figures with the name, class, or species as "Animal" will count. I don't know who you want him to bond with, but if it doesn't have "Animal" on the card somewhere, it doesn't count.
Anyway, here are some more suggestions:

Flame Strike Special Attack
Range 4. Attack 5.
Choose a figure to attack. You may also choose up to three other figures adjacent to the targeted figure to be affected by Flame Strike Special Attack. Roll attack dice once for all affected figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately. Figures with the Lava Resistant special power are not affected by Flame Strike Special Attack.

Banish
I would leave this out. As a general rule, you should give a figure no more than 3 powers, and I think it makes his Phoenixes too powerful. Also, without a marker or anything, there is way too much bookkeeping. If you insist on having it, I would change this:
Instead of attacking, you may choose...

Blizzard Special Attack
Attack 4. Range 4.
Choose a figure to attack. Any figures adjacent to the chosen figure are also affected by the Blizzard Special Attack. Jaina Proudmoore only needs a clear sight shot at the chosen figure. Roll attack dice once for all affected figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately. Jaina Proudmoore cannot be affected by her own Blizzard Special Attack.
Really? How could you get the wording wrong on a power that is exactly the same as several official powers?

Summon Water Elemental
You need to make a decision here. Because taking a turn during someone else's turn is not good, you must either make it after her turn with a max of one Elemental summoned, like this:

After taking a turn with Jaina Proudmoore, you may roll the 20-sided die. If you roll an 11 or higher, you may, if possible, place one of your previously destroyed Water Elementals on an empty space within 3 clear sight spaces of Jaina Proudmoore. You may then immediately take a turn with the summoned Water Elemental.

Or, instead of attacking with 3 tries, but no turn:

Instead of attacking, you may roll the 20-sided die. If you roll an 11 or higher, you may, if possible, place one of your previously destroyed Water Elementals on an empty space within 3 clear sight spaces of Jaina Proudmoore. After you use Summon Water Elemental once, you may use Summon Water Elemental two additional times.

Mass Teleport
...If you roll a 19 or higher,...

Arthas (both versions) does too many things. I would get rid of the insanely un-official Divine Shield (maybe up his defense by 1?), Death Pact, and that random sentence on the evil Arthas's card. They can't be in the same army anyway, for the same reason you can't have both Raelins. I won't go through the rest of the powers completely, but here are some fixes:
On a roll of If you roll a
Undead, as a Species, should be capitalized
Devotion/Unholy Aura: Friendly units figures
Power names should be in all caps
Storm Bolt and Thunder Clap need to say Special Attack, Damage should be changed to Attack
So, why does Long Rifles have a range boost? If I understand this correctly, if they are attacking a figure not adjacent to them, they get another range? Why don't they just have a 7 range?

Some of this is just my opinion, so you can ignore it if you want. I'm just trying to help you get more official-looking cards.

Yeah my Warcraft 3 cards are pretty much crap... they were my first customs I ever made and I did them last year... their powers are based off exactly what the powers in the Warcraft 3 rts do so for example long rifles in WC3 is something you can research for the dwarven rifleman that increases their range and attack by 1. What I meant by official was like C3V, SOV and C3G are the "official" custom projects and so I thought the HOF was one too... they have like 4 customs that are actually class animal so thats what I made the druid bond with. Yeah like I said Jaina was from last year before I was acquainted with even a nominal understanding of official heroscape wording so thats how I screwed it up...

[William099]

Added some more Halo and reorganized the OP.