The Book of Yondu

[IAmBatman]

It's clearer for sure.

[Ericth74]

COMPETITIVE REVIEW BOARD CHECKLIST

Spoiler Alert!

Efficiency- Check to see if your design is providing armies with turns/moves/etc. to a degree that would make it difficult or impossible for an opponent to keep up with your output.

1. Does your design allow itself or figures to move/attack/take a turn/etc. instead of/in addition to your normal turn for revealing an Order Marker? Is it granting these benefits to too broad a range of units? Does it combine with other powers to create overly long or powerful chains of actions?
Yes, it creates a potential chain of attacks, but with limitations and restrictions.
2. Does your design allow you to take actions during an opponent's turn? Can it combine with other powers to create tediously long reactions to enemy actions or a restrictive environment?
No
3. Does your design allow you to rearrange your Order Markers or otherwise bypass the costs of Order Marker requirements on the special powers of other figures?
No
4. Is your design doing anything outside of a player's turn, at the start or end of the round? Is the effect too powerful by itself or when combined with other powers?
No
5. Does your design have any powers that trigger anytime it moves as opposed to only when it moves normally on its turn? Will it be too efficient when combined with figures that grant extra moves to figures?
No
6. Is your design adding or subtracting from initiative rolls? Will it pair too easily with other figures that alter initiative or have powers triggering on the results of initiative rolls?
No

Potency- Check to see if your design is wounding/removing/etc. enemy figures, increasing the chances of other figures in your army doing so, or otherwise directly effecting the number of figures available to players to a degree that would make it difficult or impossible for an opponent to recover from.

1. Does your design have a chance to inflict wounds or destroy figures? Is it getting these chances too frequently or having to high a chance of success? Is the power balanced against expensive targets that can cause a massive swing in the game when destroyed?
Yes, once a round power that can't target a figure more than once per use, should limit its strength.
2. Is your design adding to the stats or 20-sided die rolls of other figures in your army? Is it a boosting a broad enough range of units effectively enough to become a 'mandatory' draft or inhibit future design space? Can it be combined with other boosts too easily?
No
3. Will your design benefit from stat boosts or other enhancement to an overpowering degree? Will it restrict future growth within its faction or point cost by limiting available boosts to others?
No more than any other figure with d20 wounding powers.
4. Does your design take control of enemy figures permanently or temporarily? Is it too difficult to for your opponent to regain control of their figure or recover from the losing the figure? Does the method of taking control expose the enemy figure to the powers of other figures in your army that can easily destroy it?
No
5. Can your design heal itself or others or revive itself or others? Is it doing so in a way that an opponent cannot hope to overcome in certain scenarios?
No
6. Does your design place enemy figures on its card or otherwise have an unconventional method of temporarily removing enemy figures from play? Will it guarantee your victory against a single remaining enemy figure?
No

Chicanery- Check to see if your design is preventing your opponent from taking actions with too much ease or is otherwise causing negative play experience through tactics that make your opponent feel you're 'not playing fair'

1. Does your design restrict the movement of enemy figures, or allow you to move enemy figures? Can it do so in a way that results in an unwinnable scenario for your opponent if they are down to one figure, posses only figures with a range of 1, etc.? Can your design easily combine with other figures to greatly impede enemy figures or otherwise gain an excessive advantage?
No
2. Does your design effect/change the placement of an enemy's Order Markers, or remove their Order Markers entirely? Can it force Order Markers to go onto cards that have no figures on the battlefield? Can your design easily combine with other figures to completely dictate the placement of an enemy's Order Markers or remove all of their Order Markers?
No
3. Does your design inhibit your opponent from attacking your figures or make attacking a losing proposition? Are there scenarios or combinations that make your opponent totally unable to harm your figures through attacking?
No
4. Does your design directly negate the powers of enemy figures or otherwise ignore them in a way that can completely disrupt the opponent's strategy or leave them feeling like they are stuck playing figures without special powers?
No
5. Does your design become overly powerful in a podded group of figures, or provide significant benefit to your army without leaving your Start Zone?
No
6. You can attack your own figures in Heroscape, does your design have any powers that will trigger off of doing so or otherwise wounding/destroying your own figures? Is this intentional on your part? Will the design be too efficient or potent when doing so?
No

CONSISTENCY CHECKLIST (SHORT FORM)

Spoiler Alert!

Consistency Concerns
Name and Identity
Verify character is named in a way that is clear, accurate and feels consistent with the way other characters are named.
Consistent
Uniqueness and Type
Verify that the power text reflects the listed uniqueness and type, that the uniqueness fits the character, and that squad size is listed for squads.
Consistent
Left Box
If the character's species, class or personality is reused, verify that the character feels thematically consistent with other figures that have that species, class or personality. If they are not reused, verify that there is no pre-existing species, class or personality that would make more sense.
Consistent
Size and Height
Verify that the listed size and height are accurate. Standing the mini up next to a stack of tiles, and a few other minis of various sizes, is encouraged.
Looks to be medium 5
Super Strength and Flying
Verify that these special powers are present if they make sense, and not if they don't.
Not present
New Powers - Names
Verify that any new powers are not using power names identical to, or very similar to, pre-existing powers. Verify that any new powers are actually new and not old powers with new names.
Verified
New Powers - Effects
Verify that the effect and timing of all new powers is clear. Verify that any logical immunities, benefits, or weaknesses (whether those be necessary for thematic or mechanical reasons) are implemented: consider whether defensive powers that work against normal attacks should also work against special attacks, whether or not a power has an elemental component that some figures should resist, and whether or not unliving figures (such as Undead and Androids) should be affected.
Verified
Reused Powers
Verify that the design is reusing powers in place of creating new ones, where reused powers could implement the same theme and mechanics with no differences or only trivial differences. Verify that any reused powers have the correct text.
No reuse
Power Level
Verify that the character's movement, attack, range, and defense (in conjunction with any special powers that enhance those stats) feel consistent with the capabilities of characters with analogous powers and abilities. Verify that the character falls into a similar point range to characters with comparative powers and abilities.
Verified

[Ericth74]

I propose we move to initial playtesting

@Arch-vile
@Arkham
@Lord Pyre
@LordVenoc
@MrNobody
@Ronin
@Soundwarp SG-1
@tcglkn

[Arkham]

You've got too much text here to fit on the card. You'll want to try and simplify it a bit, shave off a couple sentences if possible.

Order Marker is always capitalized as well.

[Ericth74]

Originally Posted by Arkham

You've got too much text here to fit on the card. You'll want to try and simplify it a bit, shave off a couple sentences if possible.

Order Marker is always capitalized as well.

Fixed the capitalization issue. How much am I over? Might need some help in cutting wordage down.

[tcglkn]

I’d start by dropping the entire last line of enhanced arrow. Let him go back and forth between two figures if he keeps hitting 11+. I also wouldn’t be surprised if just calling it Yaka Arrow Frenzy reduced the power name to one line and saved space.

[IAmBatman]

I'd consider cutting this line as well "adding 2 to the roll if the chosen figure has 1 Life remaining" for simplicity and just making it a slightly lower roll (9+ or 10+).

I'm sure the first power can be condensed, but I'm not up for taking a shot at it right now.

[Ericth74]

Ok edited the 3rd power to

YAKA ARROW FRENZY
Once per round, instead of attacking with Yondu, you may choose a figure within 4 spaces and roll the 20-sided die. If you roll 10 or higher, the chosen figure receives one wound and you may choose another figure within 4 spaces of the affected figure. You may continue to choose figures for Enhanced Yaka Arrow in this manner until you fail to roll 10 or higher.

[tcglkn]

You’re basically just flipping coins between two figures if that’s all you can target. If you can run up the score, good for you, it’s probably more fun that way

[IAmBatman]

Looks good to me. yea for initial pending getting wording where it needs to be (in terms of length at least).

[Ericth74]

@tcglkn did I jump the gun on the vote? Should I keep this in the design phase?

[IAmBatman]

Nah, I think you're good (realize I'm not Tickle ), just need verification that your cuts do the trick.