The Book of Ms. Marvel (Kamala)

[johnny139]

Looks good with those edits. It does bother me now that the second pip is the only one without an additional effect. The asymmetry is haunting.

[tcglkn]

Cards and bio posted.

I propose we release Ms. Marvel!

@Arch-vile - Yea
@johnny139
@Lord Pyre
@LordVenoc - Yea
@MrNobody - Yea
@Soundwarp SG-1 - Yea
@Arkham - Yea

[LordVenoc]

Should her scarf be a hit zone?

[tcglkn]

Originally Posted by LordVenoc

Should her scarf be a hit zone?

Capes are

Basically Vehicles, objects in hand and wings are not, clothes always are, and I just leave out any flying stand or energy fields if possible.

[LordVenoc]

Originally Posted by tcglkn

Capes are

Basically Vehicles, objects in hand and wings are not, clothes always are, and I just leave out any flying stand or energy fields if possible.

Works for me. I don't always remember to glance at it. Not a huge fan of the "choose one of the following" in the first power and "choose one for this turn" in the second, but not sure if there's a legitimate precedent there.

I do think you're missing the comma before and on Embiggen (I think we tend to include the oxford comma).

Yea after that's resolved.

[Soundwarp SG-1]

Since my name is on the same line as Arkham I'm going to assume I don't need to vote either and decline on voting.

[tcglkn]

Originally Posted by Soundwarp SG-1

Since my name is on the same line as Arkham I'm going to assume I don't need to vote either and decline on voting.

Got you down as an abstain

[Arch-vile]

Yea

[MrNobody]

Oof, that mini face.

Yea

[Arkham]

The yellow trim around the hitzone panel seems a bit out of place/random here, since it doesn't really read as 1:1 with her lightning bolt on her costume(and sorta wants to draw my eye to her hitzone), but that's a nitpick more than anything.

Yea once any wording issues are fixed.

[Soundwarp SG-1]

That mini is rough

Anyway, actual vote

Yea

Random wording thoughts:

Should the stretchy fun times power have an 'only' in the last sentence? Like so:

"Each option may only be chosen once per round."

IDK, sounds a smidge more clear to me, but I'm not a language guy and it would be pretty silly for someone to read the current one as like.. just letting you know choosing a different one each round is an option or something.

Embiggen refers to 'her' without first saying who 'her' is, that seems weird. Feels like it would be better like:

"For the remainder of the round, add 2 to Ms. Marvel's Defense number, each turn you may choose all options for her Morphogenic Mayhem special power and her size and height become large 10."


EDIT: On the yellow thing, would it make more sense to have the lightning bolt looking shape above the life value be the splash of yellow?

[tcglkn]

Originally Posted by LordVenoc

Not a huge fan of the "choose one of the following" in the first power and "choose one for this turn" in the second, but not sure if there's a legitimate precedent there.

I do think you're missing the comma before and on Embiggen (I think we tend to include the oxford comma).

Removed the "of the following options" bit from the first power.

Originally Posted by Soundwarp SG-1

Should the stretchy fun times power have an 'only' in the last sentence? Like so:

"Each option may only be chosen once per round."

IDK, sounds a smidge more clear to me, but I'm not a language guy and it would be pretty silly for someone to read the current one as like.. just letting you know choosing a different one each round is an option or something.

Embiggen refers to 'her' without first saying who 'her' is, that seems weird. Feels like it would be better like:

"For the remainder of the round, add 2 to Ms. Marvel's Defense number, each turn you may choose all options for her Morphogenic Mayhem special power and her size and height become large 10."


EDIT: On the yellow thing, would it make more sense to have the lightning bolt looking shape above the life value be the splash of yellow?

Updated both of these and liked the lightning bolt suggestion so that's updated too.