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Old August 18th, 2012, 08:52 PM
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Re: Battles of Valhalla

Wow, I never knew that I was good. Thanks Bummer and you as well TGRF. I understand now and I am willinging to finish this story soon.

Oh and I fixed a few things on previous chapter, nothing minor, but a simple mis-letter.

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Old August 18th, 2012, 09:28 PM
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Re: Battles of Valhalla

You're actually a very good writer, at least in my opinion, you just need to work on your grammar. Be sure to read your stuff through, it would really help. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Old August 19th, 2012, 04:18 AM
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Gah! I was just posting another chapter when something happened to the internet. I lost the data and have to start from scratch again. I will have the next chapter up soon. I promise.

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Old August 19th, 2012, 09:04 PM
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Re: Battles of Valhalla

You should put them on word first. You have the spell check, besides. (Don't trust it on the grammar though.) That's what I always do.

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Old August 19th, 2012, 10:10 PM
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You should put them on word first. You have the spell check, besides. (Don't trust it on the grammar though.) That's what I always do.
Really? I get the spell check on this site (just spelling).

I anticipate your next chapter with much eagerness.
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Old August 20th, 2012, 03:22 AM
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Re: Battles of Valhalla

Thanks guys.

Oh and Bumper, earlier I said of what you thought about the story so far. The heros, battles, favorite parts. But its alright about saying about the writing of my story, I just got to focus on the grammer and I will be fine.

Here is the new chapter, thank you for your patients.

"Previously on Battles of Valhalla. The first battle of the war of the Valkyrie has just begun. Drake must pull his men together and turn the tide of this battle before all is lost."

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Hope you enjoyed, more chapter are on the way and I hope you stay tuned.
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Old August 25th, 2012, 01:40 AM
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Re: Battles of Valhalla

Good heavens! You nearly have us even with the grammar! IMO. Great update, loved it.
I don't know about bumper, but my favorite parts are, oddly enough, those where all the ancient heroes of heroscape meet each other, and the stories concerning them are retold. You just do it really well.
Not much to point out in terms of grammar. Just give me an aspect you want to fix, and I'll show you what needs to be done. It would help if I also knew what tense you want.
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Old August 25th, 2012, 03:41 PM
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Oh, sorry about that then Bro-man....

My favorite parts then are when the characters give their pre-war-of-the-wellspring stories. I was going to bring this up in the new general discussion thread, but I was wondering if I could use that idea for a story of my own.

The battle scenes are also done well, so they are also on my list. Tying it together, the new chapter is great, I can't wait for more.
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Old August 25th, 2012, 09:38 PM
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Thanks guys. And for that, here is another chapter to wet your appetite.

"Previously on Battles of Valhalla. Drake has bargined more then he can chew. After dealing with ravenous wolves he now faced the leader of the blue skins. The leaders pet drove him into the channel and Drake now comes face to face with the monster."

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Hope you enjoyed more chapters coming there way. Stay tuned for more. Oh and thanks for the comments guys. Anything you liked in the recent chapters that caught your attention?

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Old August 26th, 2012, 10:44 AM
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And Mimring joins the party. Excellent post Bro-man. I only had one major concern. This would have been Drake's second brush with death as his death is what brought him here in the first place.

Good job!!
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Old August 26th, 2012, 09:24 PM
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And Mimring joins the party. Excellent post Bro-man. I only had one major concern. This would have been Drake's second brush with death as his death is what brought him here in the first place.

Good job!!
Got it fixed.

Sorry about that I forgot about before he was brought to Valhalla in the first place. Anything else you liked in any previous chapters?
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Old September 2nd, 2012, 03:07 AM
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Another chapter. Sorry about the wait, had to deal with college work and what not. Here it goes.

"Previously on Battles of Valhalla. Drake came within deaths reach a second time. After Bard and his men distracted the monster, Drake escapes to meet with Concan. On his path through the channel he ran into a solider named Samuel Billings. As the two talked a shadow looms over them. As the massive creature descends from the skies it revelas itself to all that it is a Dragon."

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