Horizon in Sight: Dan's Tale

[Tornado]

Whatever you are comfortable with TGRF.

[TGRF]

The fiction has been posted here (up to chapter three). The website is very basic and still under construction, but it gets the job done.

Feel free to comment either there or here. New chapters will be posted exclusively there.

~TGRF.

[TGRF]

Chapter Four is now posted here!

Here's an excerpt:

Spoiler Alert!

The closer he got, the more he could feel. At first, the hairs on his hand stood up. He could feel a prickling all across his fingers. He went further, and soon he began to feel resistance, like he was pushing through water. The resistance got stronger, and soon Dan’s palm was actually hurting, as if the skin was trying to pull away from the Barrier. Determined, Dan pushed his hand the last few inches, and finally felt the Barrier.

~TGRF.

[TheAverageFan]

The other website looks suitable enough. I will continue to post my comments on this particular thread, however.

~TAF, who thinks the excerpts are a good idea

[TGRF]

To make up for lost time, Chapters 5, 6, & 7 are now posted. Chapter five can be found here.

An excerpt from somewhere within those three chapters:

Spoiler Alert!

There was a soft thump against the wall. The box had arrived. Any second now, the panel would slide away, and Dan would know what was going on. He stood there, next to the hall, excitement coursing through him. After a second the panel slid into the wall, revealing the Shaft. And there was definitely someone inside it. But it wasn’t RR.

~TGRF.

[TGRF]

Chapters 8 & 9 are now posted. Chapter 8 can be found here.



Remember comments/criticism/questions are welcomed and highly beneficial to me. I want to know what my readers are thinking.



~TGRF.

[TGRF]

Chapter ten can now be found here.

Come on, my readers. Give me something here. Good? Bad? Intriguing? Boring? Thought-out? Simplistic? Well done? Sloppy? I can't get better without input.

~TGRF.

[TheAverageFan]

Sorry TGRF, I've been slipping behind on my reading. I'll edit in my thoughts when I catch up sooner or later though.

~TAF

[TGRF]

Chapter Eleven can now be found here!



Also, on the side menu, you can now see visual progress of my ongoing writing projects (widget hasn't been updated in 8 years and is still amazing).



~TGRF.

[hose]

I got a chance to catch up on the recent chapters today. I’m enjoying it, it’s definitely something that would keep me turning the pages. (If there were pages )
I will try to gather my thoughts and convey them in a way that makes sense at a later date. I’m only 3/4 awake and can’t quite get what I want to say to come out anywhere close to right. It keeps coming out jumbled and probably not helpful. I am enjoying it, and that satisfies one of your goals, I think.

[TGRF]

Originally Posted by hose

I got a chance to catch up on the recent chapters today. I’m enjoying it, it’s definitely something that would keep me turning the pages. (If there were pages )
I will try to gather my thoughts and convey them in a way that makes sense at a later date. I’m only 3/4 awake and can’t quite get what I want to say to come out anywhere close to right. It keeps coming out jumbled and probably not helpful. I am enjoying it, and that satisfies one of your goals, I think.

Good to hear from you, hose. I look forward to your thoughts!



~TGRF, who can use both comments and criticism.

[TGRF]

Chapter Twelve - Anger is now posted here!



I've decided to stop doing the excerpts. Most chapters don't lend themselves well to them, and they usually spoil more than they prompt you to read. I might do one if there's a really good passage, but otherwise, I won't.



~TGRF.