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Old November 16th, 2014, 01:27 PM
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Hoping you can look this one over before we officially submit it to SoV. Be cruel.
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Re: Help With Wurdz

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Hoping you can look this one over before we officially submit it to SoV. Be cruel.
Music to an editor's ears.

That said, this looks pretty tight. I'm so excited to see a kobold squad I'll type out your powers for you:


Warrior Devotion
At the start of the game, choose a Unique Warrior Hero you control to be the Kobolds of Idona Keep's Master. While their chosen Master is in play, when taking a turn with the Kobolds of Idona Keep, you may move and attack with 1 additional Kobold for each Wound Marker on their Master's Army Card. You can choose only one Master for all Kobolds of Idona Keep you control. Kobolds of Idona Keep cannot attack their own Master.

Avenge the Master
A Kobold of Idona Keep rolls 2 additional attack dice while its chosen Master is destroyed.

Scale
When moving up or down levels of terrain, Kobolds of Idona Keep may add 2 to their height.
Warrior Devotion: There are a couple things about this power that make me wonder if it will create weird corner cases. It's good enough for me, but I'm more cavalier in my approach to those things than some others are.

The "while in play" language is unprecedented (as far as I know) and doesn't seem quite Heroscape-y. You can eliminate it and add some theme with this: "For each wound marker on the Master, when taking a turn with the Kobolds of Idona Keep, you may move and attack with 1 additional Kobold for each Wound Marker on their Master's Army Card. All Kobolds moving or attacking with Warriors Devotion must be within 12 clear sight spaces of the Master prior to its movement."

Avenge the Master: I haven't followed your thread, but I'm guessing that the "While" language appears to adjust for the possibility that a Master will occasionally be able to come back from the dead, and you don't want to give the boon twice. I propose the following, more elegant alternative: "If the Master of the Kobolds of Idona Keep is destroyed, the Kobolds of Idona Keep add 2 to their attack." Expressed this way, as a conditional, if the precedent is untrue (Master becomes not destroyed) the antecedent (the bonus) fails.

Scale: It looks like there may be an extra space between "of" and "Idona" on the card.

Overall it looks good. I'm assuming the minis must be truly tiny, considering the Goblins are height 3. Also, I am sure you have considered carefully that (a) Jotun and Shurrak are both qualified Masters, and (b) at this price point it should be pretty simple to build a swarm of these and something else that can put some wounds on the Master. I'm not sure of an elegant way to write up Warrior Devotion disqualifying (1) wounds from (2) any figure you control. You could, however, use a marker, or a maximum, or change it to "takes damage from an opponent's normal attack," or some such.

Thanks for sharing!

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Re: Help With Wurdz

That "while in play" line comes straight from MacDirk's Highland Fury:

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Re: Help With Wurdz

Ah, ok. Thank you for checking my work, MS. I don't have any MacDirk Warriors & was not familiar with their card.

I still don't think it's very Heroscape-y, and I personally don't like it, but if this is headed to the SoV I am aware of the importance of a conservative approach. Ok, leave it. (Blech.)

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Re: Help With Wurdz

D_S please read over your proposed text for Warrior Devotion one more time.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

Hmm. Well, it's late and I'm trying to finish a project, but if I missed something in the alternate language (and mechanic) for "while in play," just ignore it. I yield the day to the MacDirks, as far as that goes.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

"All Kobolds... its movement" should be "Each Kobold... its movement", if we're using the 12 spaces model. That's what you were referring to, right @capsocrates ?
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Old November 17th, 2014, 12:35 AM
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Re: Help With Wurdz

So the repetition doesn't bother anyone?


"For each wound marker on the Master, when taking a turn with the Kobolds of Idona Keep, you may move and attack with 1 additional Kobold for each Wound Marker on their Master's Army Card. All Kobolds moving or attacking with Warriors Devotion must be within 12 clear sight spaces of the Master prior to its movement."

It bothers me enough that I would vote to review if it were submitted to me that way.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

I'll look at it tomorrow. Sometimes those happen but there may be a better option.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

Good catch, Cap. The fix is easy enough:
For each wound marker on the Master, wWhen taking a turn with the Kobolds of Idona Keep, you may move and attack with 1 additional Kobold for each Wound Marker on their Master's Army Card. All Kobolds moving or attacking with Warriors Devotion must be within 12 clear sight spaces of the Master prior to its movement."
Which leaves:
When taking a turn with the Kobolds of Idona Keep, you may move and attack with 1 additional Kobold for each Wound Marker on their Master's Army Card. All Kobolds moving or attacking with Warriors Devotion must be within 12 clear sight spaces of the Master prior to its movement.
. . . assuming you have no interest in further tweaking.


edit: tagging @johnny139 , to make sure he sees this follow up.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

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"All Kobolds... its movement" should be "Each Kobold... its movement", if we're using the 12 spaces model. That's what you were referring to, right @capsocrates ?
I think you missed this one too.

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Re: Help With Wurdz

Yes. "Each" is better.

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