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Greetings readers and writers, and welcome to the third installment in the Dilmir series: The Fall of Feylund. This is a direct sequel to The Curse of Feylund, and continues the tale of Dilmir and his magic.

Now, on the chance that you don't read my FFC blogs (for which you would be forgiven), it is important to note that this is NOT the end of the series. The series will continue and conclude with book four. You can read why I've made this decision, as well as what my immediate writing plans are, on the relevant blog post, and you should likely read that post before reading this story.

Onto the fiction itself. Most of what you need to know can be found in the introduction. Once again, the fiction is posted in its entirety over on my website. All chapters can be found in the drop-down under 'The Fall of Feylund'. And once again, the website is owned by me, and devoid of ads or background programs.

A few quick notes: there are three maps which go with this story. One is for Eld'rin, which you've seen before. One is for Feylund, which was tacked onto the end of book two. So you might have seen that, or you might have missed it. The final map is for the city of Elnnesar, and is new for this tale. All three maps are spoiler free.

There is a glossary for this fiction, located after all of the chapters. It should never strictly be required to understand what's going on, but if you do go to it, know that it too should be spoiler free. Obviously it contains translations for the spells spoken, but I don't think there's enough context to glean anything from them alone.

Finally, all PoV shifts should be separated clearly. If you find any which aren't, or any typos or other mistakes, please let me know. Other than that, enjoy the story, and please be sure to let me know what you thought. Your feedback is what makes my writing better.

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I am here.

I kinda forgot that you'd post the whole thing. I will get through it in shifts and give you the usual feedback.

22 Chapters doesn't seem any longer than the previous story

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22 Chapters doesn't seem any longer than the previous story

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It was 114 pages of unbroken text. The Curse was 98 if I remember. So a tad longer. That 150 page prediction was from when I was still trying to squish two stories into one (see my blog).

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I have since read the blog, and it all makes sense now. I am curious if the fourth book will be much shorter if the way you described it is to be believed. At any rate, hopefully it fares better than when Eregon went from a trilogy to a cYcLE (I dunno if anything's ever made me drop all interest in a franchise faster than Brisignr, except maybe Kingdom Hearts 3D)

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I have since read the blog, and it all makes sense now. I am curious if the fourth book will be much shorter if the way you described it is to be believed. At any rate, hopefully it fares better than when Eregon went from a trilogy to a cYcLE (I dunno if anything's ever made me drop all interest in a franchise faster than Brisignr, except maybe Kingdom Hearts 3D)

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I hope so too. As far as length goes, it's up in the air. It entirely depends on how many subplots I can weave into it, plus how long the main plot(s) take. It could be a quick 50 page dash or a 150 page monstrosity. Only time will tell.

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I'll start it soon. Just finishing off other stuff.

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

OK I read some yesterday but didn't post my thoughts because things got a little carried away Here are my thoughts thus far

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Snarks and oddities aside, I like it a lot so far. I like the changes to Dilmir's character and the faster pace, and hopefully it keeps its momentum.

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Thanks for the feedback TAF, keep it coming. Although I have to say I keep having this reaction whenever your early comments come in; because you speculate about what might come later, and invariably there's something in there where I go - 'darn. Why didn't I think of that?' But that aside, here's some replies:

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Chapters 5 - 7:

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At this point in Curse I already had a big issue with the story in its structure. So far this is much better and I remain into it. You've really raised the stakes, quickened the pace, solidified the main character arc and given him a good opposite-type character to work with. And I'm glad Aldir has not been forgotten.

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Glad it's bypassing Curse in the expectation department. Looking forward to the next round of input.

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