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Old September 20th, 2022, 10:57 PM
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Re: The Fall of Feylund

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Chapters 8-whatever:
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Halfway through, and where we're going from here I've got no idea. I'll keep you posted.

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Old September 20th, 2022, 11:47 PM
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Re: The Fall of Feylund

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Typos fixed, thanks for spotting them.

Glad to know the direction is staying hidden. Based on your comments, I'm looking forward to your thoughts on several upcoming chapters.

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Old September 22nd, 2022, 02:52 PM
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Re: The Fall of Feylund

You must be doing something right because I read the second half in one sitting. My thoughts are probably longer than the story itself:

Chapters 12-End:
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Very well done, you took what I wanted to see and really ran with it. I'm curious how the others will react to it.

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Old September 22nd, 2022, 06:38 PM
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Re: The Fall of Feylund

Your thoughts were so long that I literally had lunch in the middle of reading them. But that's a good thing, I love the detail. I also have quite a bit in the form of replies:
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I'm obviously super stoked about the rating. At this point, being so close to writing my first novel, I really wanted to get some solid fan fiction in with high ratings, on the off-chance that a future publisher actually looks at any of it.

As for the final installment, I'm definitely taking all of your input into consideration. You have a lot of good points and reactions, and I already have some good ideas for where the story should go (as in the middle - the end I already have sorted). I definitely want to incorporate all of the characters we have, and find uses for them all. And I definitely want to work on connecting Aranthar with the central question more. He's not quite as black as he might seem in this story (something I tried - and evidently failed - to convey), so I'll definitely be working on showing his true colors more before the conclusion.

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Old September 22nd, 2022, 10:18 PM
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Re: The Fall of Feylund

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

Perhaps the latter. Do not underestimate the narrative value of the human heart in conflict with itself. It's more compelling than any zombie army or vampire could ever be.

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

...Hey wait a minute didn't Dilmir's hand fall off or something at the end of the last story? Did anything ever come of that I don't recall a single mention of having to be left-handed in this one

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Old September 24th, 2022, 01:22 PM
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...Hey wait a minute didn't Dilmir's hand fall off or something at the end of the last story? Did anything ever come of that I don't recall a single mention of having to be left-handed in this one

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His hand got injured, and it was said he'd have to learn to use his left for some things, but to be honest I kind of forgot about it. That being said, it makes sense from his point of view: learning to use his left hand over his right is miniscule in comparison to the internal dilemma he was facing. Thus one could be forgiven for neglecting to mention it.

Obviously it kind of negates any sense of loss incurred by the damage to said hand, so that's not great, but...

~TGRF, who would have - and will - include it if he needs to detail any task which would specifically use the right hand. Such as training.

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

Just started reading this...Went through 10 chapters. I'll have to stop for a while.

So far it's a solid story of destruction. I'll start up again probably tomorrow morning.

Just when you thought it was all right, someone made it alright.

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Re: The Fall of Feylund

Wow.

Well written, solidly paced and thought provoking.

@The Grim Reaper's Friend I have one thought that may help improve it...and even it's simply a niggling little criticism so feel free to ignore.

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Looking forward to the next!

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Glad you enjoyed it AMIS! I'm not sure I'm understanding what you're saying in the above though... you would have preferred Alfimir to ask why Aranthar will let him go so that Aranthar could give a deeper reason? Only for Aranthar to then say he'll him later anyway? How come?

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