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The bio's first sentence says 'losing both' and then lists three people - both is used to reference two things exactly. Both needs cutting.
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There is only 2. Shadow Champion & the successor (Lyrissa & Tasmia). I probably just haven't used the correct punctuation there.
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No, I don't think you have, and it's still three people, even if two of them are both successors. You could make it work as listing two things if you put something like 'losing both the Shadow Champions and his successors, Tasmia and her mother, Lyrissa Mallor'. That way, you changed it from being grammatically three objects (Shadow Champion, Lyrissa, Tasmia) to two (Shadow Champion and his successors) with the second being further defined immediately after.
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Sorry we still haven't bridged that communication gap. The current Shadow Champion is Lyrissa. The Successor is Tasmia. Only talking about 2 persons. That's why Tasmia was taken away from her mother so the planet wouldn't loose both together. Maybe it should be something like:
"losing both the Shadow Champion (Lyrissa Mallor - Tasmia's mother) & the successor (Tasmia) in a single attack."
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Ah, okay, misunderstood. The punctuation really was misleading in that case. In that case I'd phrase it something like 'losing both Lyrissa Mallor, the then current Shadow Champion, and her daughter and successor, Tasmia, in a single attack' - the brackets are feeling inelegant to me here.
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Karate Kid could do with being linked in the bio.
Otherwise cleared.
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I didn't know that was a thing. I get linking when they are linked by powers e.g. Green Arrow & Black Canary. But this is just a general name drop. How would I also link to all the Legionnaires?
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You wouldn't - you only link when a unit that has a card is name dropped. You don't name drop organisations (unless, for example, they have a squad card - I'd link HYDRA to the HYDRA Agents for example), so Legionnaires doesn't need linking (unless you want to link to the Legionnaire post in the synergy archive, which isn't needed or, I believe, standard form, but I wouldn't oppose).
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I'm still not convinced this is the correct thing to do. He doesn't really have stake in her card or the design.
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Well, that's the consistent aesthetic we've used for a long time now - if a character is name dropped in the bio, they're linked, meaning that someone reading the bio is then also informed that C3G has a card for that character (which they may not otherwise know) and is given easy and immediate access to it. Makes sense to me.