Thread: Horizon in Sight: Dan's Tale
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Old January 29th, 2019, 04:03 PM
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Re: Horizon in Sight: Dan's Tale
Eeeeeeeeeeeee! More fan fiction!

Exceptional writing as always TGRF. Already a much different beginning to the original story, but just as intriguing a start. I chuckled finishing the chapter, scrolling back up, and seeing the chapter name again. Looks to be a promising start.

Only critique I have is a missed new paragraph about halfway through. You can see the indent in the middle where someone missed pressing Enter. Simple fix of course.

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in THE ENEMY'S LAST RETREAT

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