Re: The Book of Ninjak (Vote for On Deck)
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
EPB shurikened.
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Re: The Book of Ninjak (Design Phase)
Minor edit suggestions:
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Cards look fine. It does look like his little loincloth thing was left out of the hitzone, but I have to think that was a choice? |
Re: The Book of Ninjak (Design Phase)
Updated. I believe the cloth was left out because we called it optional on the modding guide.
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
I almost missed this. Please tag art team member when making a change to a card. Especially when it's ON DECK
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
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Poker card needs the updated language above.
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
Not the biggest fan of out-of-universe writing such as found in the second sentence, but that's likely just me.
Third sentence is clunky - 'parents' on the end isn't required. Cut that and replace spy with spies. 'MI-6' doesn't need the dash. What Undead Monk? That comes out of nowhere, and reads as though I'm supposed to know. |
Re: The Book of Ninjak
Undead Monk is a character, and he's only ever referred to as the Undead Monk. Some additional context would probably be helpful, but other than being undead and a monk, there's no much there. :lol:
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
Yeah, I can see how that reference could feel like kind of a non sequitur, but the Undead Monk is... pretty much exactly what it says on the tin.
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MI-6 actually has the dash in universe, so I actually corrected the instance I missed it. Otherwise, updated and corrected.
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Re: The Book of Ninjak
Undead Monk makes me think of Lode Runner.
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