Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Book looks great! I'll give it a final readthrough soon and vote her through. :up:
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Seems fine to me, but I'm not a proofreader so I'm not your huckleberry for catching typos and such.
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Quick-and-dirty notes (low laptop battery, so not double-checking myself on anything or doing a lot of formatting):
-Drafting --Start Zone? (should be caps, I think) --Extraneous period in third bullet point (Army. Card.) -Entering --Army Card (card should be capitalized) right at the start of the section --Probably shouldn't capitalize the list of sizes --I'd spell out the numbers in "but only has 1 figure occupying it, a 2nd figure can enter that car" --As far as "specific entrances/exits marked on the figure itself", just to be super duper clear... does having a door on the sculpt count? Picture suggests no. So what would that look like? -Occupying --Allowing to move to the driver's space at the cost of one space of movement.... this is the vehicle's movement, presumably? I'd rewrite this sentence either way, because switching the driver with another figure isn't quite normal movement. -P&FC --Hmm, how will we mark clear sight openings for a car with an open top? Not really a problem for this rulebook, just something I've been thinking about. -Moving --We mention that VDOs never take LEAs here, but it might be worth rewording that to mention that the reason they don't is because they're never considered engaged? I think that'd be worth emphasizing, and it provides more context if someone quickly looks the movement rules up. -Exiting --Engagement within VDOs is mentioned for the first time here... I think it's a logical extrapolation of what's mentioned in Occupying, but it should be specifically mentioned in Occupying for clarity. (Especially because getting enemy figures into the same vehicle will be a departure for anyone who played the old version of the VDO rules) -Destroying --I think "no LEAs" should be spelled out for the figures that were inside the car, as well as the ones droping off the top. (Given that they can be engaged inside the car) Looking real sharp here, guys! |
Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
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For the portions in blue: 1. I changed the text to indicate that it was marked both on the figure and on the Army Card. We'll have to figure out how exactly we want to do that when we get to VDOs that do that (The TARDIS may be the first) but that should at least give us the opening we need to do so without making the specifics a "today problem." 2. I imagine we'd have to add a third, overhead hitzone for ones that are open air. I find those mostly annoying due to the fact that, thematically, you should be able to see a figure that's in an open air vehicle, so probably not something I'll be doing much myself. But I understand that things like motorcycles and convertible sports cars are likely to happen. 3. I understand where you're coming from, but ... Occupying has this line currently: "Figures occupying a VDO are considered adjacent to all other figures occupying that VDO and to the VDO itself, but are never considered adjacent to or engaged with figures outside of the VDO." I don't think it's unreasonable for us to ask users to know that two enemy figures adjacent to each other are considered engaged. I feel it'd be awkward to add essentially a definition of engagement to that clause. Great notes overall! Thanks, Ronin. :-) |
Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Should be up to date now.
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Sweet! You rock.
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
DRAFTING DESTRUCTIBLE OBJECTS
... {missing "in"} A DO included in a player's army is considered like any other figure in that player's army, with a few key exceptions: {This confuses me...} • A DO is not considered under a player's control, unless it is a VDO occupied by a figure in your army. {I thought that was the idea of draftable DOs. You having control of them? Why else are we making them draftable?} EXAMPLE 1: Vehicle Card {missing fullstop} Like the Official Destructible Object cards, Vehicle Destructible Object (VDO) cards have a similar appearance but with a few additions. {I don't think this is succinct enough} Driver Space: The circle space is where the figure is placed and designates who the driver of the vehicle is. {Maybe something like...?} Quote:
OCCUPYING VEHICLES ... {I think this needs an addition to say they have to move the figure to driver space} If a figure you control is the only figure occupying a VDO or if a figure you control is occupying the designated Driver space in a VDO, you now control that VDO. If your figure is the only figure occupying the VDO, that figure must be placed on the Driver Space of the card. {Not sure of the intent here so I think it needs a little more clarity of who can be targeted.} Unless a special power indicates otherwise, a figure can only target one figure occupying a VDO at a time. {If there are multiple figures occupying the vehicle how &/or who chooses which is being targeted? Is it always the driver first? Or driver last?} MOVING VEHICLES {You don't move Army Cards} Instead of moving normally with an Army Card you control, if one of the figures from that card occupies the Driver space for a VDO, you may move that VDO any number of spaces up to its Move number. You may only move each VDO this way once during each player turn. {What about...?} Quote:
When moving the VDO, follow standard movement rules. VDOs are never considered engaged and never make or receive leaving engagement attacks. EXITING VEHICLES ... {I feel like this is an important paragraph & should be highlighted by either being in a coloured box or at the least all bold.} If your figure exits a VDO that you do not control and your figure does not have the Super Strength special power, before placing your figure, roll one unblockable attack die against it. DESTROYING VEHICLES ... After removing the destroyed VDO from the battlefield, players may, in initiative order, place all of their figures that remain on top of the VDO's sculpt on spaces previously occupied by the destroyed VDO. {Duplicated sentence.} Then players may, in initiative order, place each remaining figure they control that was occupying the VDO's Army Card on a space or spaces previously occupied by the destroyed VDO. If a figure that was occupying a destroyed VDO cannot be placed on a legal space or spaces, that figure is immediately destroyed. {I think we need an example of how this all works included in the book.} |
Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Answers in red.
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
A few things I noticed:
- Example 1 box has "Uniquenes" instead of "Uniqueness" - We introduce DO and VDO without defining them. Pretty easy to figure out what means what, but I'd like the first instance of each to include a parenthetical clarifying to make sure. Otherwise it looks good - these booklets are always top notch. |
Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Already had the red under Example 1 and added the blue just now:
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
Ah, I see, they're in the Example box - didn't think to check there. Works for me. :up:
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Re: The Book of Vehicle Rules - VOTE for On Deck
OK. I'm calling a moratorium on wording edits. We've had our best and brightest all take at least one pass at it and things have been updated. In the interest of not letting perfect be the enemy of good, I'm going to let
@japes
do the final edits here based on the comments and the SP updates, then I'm going to call for the On Deck vote again and let that vote go through one way or the other. :-)
I think it's time for this to wrap and for energies spent on it to be repurposed elsewhere! |
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