Ok, I made a new story, please tell me what it needs, to be successful, or if its good for a start out.( I myself think it jumps around too much.)

Ok, so last night it was storming really hard, I decided to get up and look at the storm, so I jumped off my bed and landed on A heroscape piece that cut my middle toe, with a fairly nice slice. After I got a bandage on it I got back into my bed and made up this funny pre-caution word. Remember your C.A.R.D.S.
C=clean up your map after your done.
A=Assist your cut if you get one, and stop scaping for like 5 mins.
R=Resist the urge to leave the map on the floor.
D=Do not leave heroscape pieces for people to walk on them.
S=Scan the area after cleaning to make sure you got everything.