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new comic.

Posted October 16th, 2008 at 09:12 PM by scottishlad5
Ok, I made a new story, please tell me what it needs, to be successful, or if its good for a start out.( I myself think it jumps around too much.)
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Pickledpie's Avatar
You should make it funnier. I see a great comic moment when the one guy gets shot.
Posted October 16th, 2008 at 09:23 PM by Pickledpie Pickledpie is offline
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A comic does not need to be funny...If you want funny go read Hagar.

Nice start there Scotty...but the pics are a bit blurry and distorted (could be my computer though)
Posted October 16th, 2008 at 09:54 PM by Onacara Onacara is offline
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scottishlad5's Avatar
Thats why I decided with serious, because everyone is doing comedy. I might do comedy later, but for now I am doing this.
Oh and the main sentinels name is a anagram with my real name.
Posted October 16th, 2008 at 09:57 PM by scottishlad5 scottishlad5 is offline
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S1R_ART0R1US's Avatar
Aaron, I think that if you are going to make a serious story, your grammar should be correct. The beginning had quite a few typos and distracted me fairly significantly (enough that I'm writing about it).

I look forward to seeing more in the future after that suspenseful ending.
Posted October 16th, 2008 at 10:14 PM by S1R_ART0R1US S1R_ART0R1US is offline
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scottishlad5's Avatar
Yes, you are correct, and yes I do need to work on my grammar, but like I said its my rough copy.
Posted October 16th, 2008 at 10:21 PM by scottishlad5 scottishlad5 is offline
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Roland's Avatar
Also, instead of stretching an image out of proportion to fit within a panel, crop it to the size you want it to be without screwing up the aspect ratio.
Posted October 17th, 2008 at 12:45 PM by Roland Roland is offline
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scottishlad5's Avatar
sweet, thanks for the advice roland.
Posted October 17th, 2008 at 05:40 PM by scottishlad5 scottishlad5 is offline
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The B.I.V.'s Avatar
I love your Deadpool mask, but that really has nothing to do with your story.

Who's narrating? All the guys in the story were either Vikings, Knights or the Kyrie. There were far too many colloquialisms for those guys. If it was Sgt. Drake or someone like that, narrating then it makes more sense. But Knights Vikings and even Kyrie would use more formal speech I would think...

Brandon
Posted January 7th, 2010 at 01:30 PM by The B.I.V. The B.I.V. is offline
 
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