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[IshMEL]

Originally Posted by Kaemon Awa 123

Thanks for the positive feedback guys! I'll move Drow Assassin to the "Finished" bin of my customs.

Any chance you guys could give me a hand on this guy? He's different from anything in Classic 'Scape, and while I think I avoided most of the rules snags...

I'm confused by that last part of "Possess" -- is "this army card" refer to the possessed figure's, or to Unholy Wraith? If the former, perhaps "Possessed figures may use any of their special attacks or powers" would be simpler.

What happens if he possesses Marcu E and you roll for Eternal Hatred? Would Marcu's owner get to take a turn with Marcu?

[awesomeunleashed]

Originally Posted by IshMEL

What happens if he possesses Marcu E and you roll for Eternal Hatred? Would Marcu's owner get to take a turn with Marcu?

When will everyone learn that you must reveal an order marker on Marcu to activate Eternal Hatred?

It says "this army card," so I'm pretty sure that's what it means.

[lefton4ya]

I don't really see why you are of placing the dead figure on the Wraith's card instead of the army card (and then changing possess to match), but whatever.

Instead of no red hit zone, my rules lawyer side would prefer you have a power similar to Thorian speed, except adding in special attacks or powers, but the lid in me thinks the 100% grey zone makes it cool.

As far as stats & pricing, not sure about survivability with 2 defense (with effectively Thorian speed+), but it could be OK. I am surprised it is 5 move without flying though, so it will be hard for him to get first attack and might die quickly. Definitely better in dungeon scenarios or against a lot of heroes than against squads, where it will die quickly and not get to use its powers.

P..S. I might submit one of my customs for critiquing, but I figure I should probably leave feedback for others already on the list first.

[DeathDoom]

On the Unholy Wraith, I would suggest removing the placement of the figure on the Spirit's card so that the Viking Bros don't interfere with the power.

[Fedex worker]

It seems like you already have a lot of customs you're working on, but if you don't mind I'd like to nominate my custom, Morig:

Morig is obviously a filler, but he fills a role that I like. He can actually do a lot of damage, but is still really weak and will probably die in 1 or 2 attacks. This however, is expected among fillers. He also fills a much needed (IMO) 15 points spot, and can be very useful to clean up melee figures. Ranged figures can probably kill him before he can attack though. He does get a bonus from Khosumet, but I doubt this will ever come into play unless set up correctly and with some luck. Being undead there are also a few things that work against him (some treasure glyph, Ana Karinthon) but these too probably wont come into play too much.

So, lemme know what you guys think. I really want to keep him at 15 points and having 2 lives rather than one, but anything else I don't really mind changing.

[IshMEL]

Bumping here to ask if anyone has feedback on Sigrid Ironwill:

Spoiler Alert!

SIGRID IRONWILL
Dwarf
Unique Hero
Warrior
Loyal
Medium 4
5 Life
Range 1
Attack 3
Defense 4
90 Points

FOEHAMMER OF THE BURNING FORGE
When Sigrid Ironwill attacks with a normal attack, she may attack two engaged figures if they are adjacent to both each other and to Sigrid Ironwill. Roll attack dice once for both figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately.

CHANNEL ANCESTRAL STRENGTH
Once per round, before moving, you may roll the 20-sided die.
* If you roll 1-3, Sigrid Ironwill takes one wound and cannot move or attack this turn.
* If you roll 4-12, nothing happens.
* If you roll 13-18, all friendly dwarves within 6 spaces add 1 extra attack die for the remainder of the round.
* If you roll 18 or higher, all friendly dwarves within 6 spaces add 1 extra attack die and 1 extra defense die for the remainder of the round.
Sigrid Ironwill is affected by Channel Ancestral Strength.

Synergy Benefits Received

Axegrinders of Burning Forge: Dwarven Strategic Bonding:
As a Dwarf Hero, Sigrid Ironwill may benefit from the Axegrinders' DWARVEN STRATEGIC BONDING activation synergy.

Synergy Benefits Offered

Channel Ancestral Strength can effect all Dwarves: Migol Ironwill, The Axegrinders of Burning Forge, Mogrimm Forgehammer, Darrak Ambershard

BIO
Daughter of Migol, Sigrid Ironwill wields the Foehammer, which for a thousand years has protected the Burning Forge Clan. Her ferocity in battle (and her red hair) have earned her the name "Flame of the Forge" among her fellow dwarven warriors. With the Foehammer of the Burning Forge, she cleaves through enemies and can call on the spirits of the clan's ancestors to aid her fellow dwarves. But channelling the dead might cost Sigrid her life...

She's my first custom so I'm hoping to get some advice, especially on costing. Thanks!

[Fi Skirata]

Here is the newest update for my Threforian Raptors (in the Auggie's Bounty special slot):

I plan on submitting this to Auggies Sunday night, assuming their is nothing else that needs to be changed before then.

[William099]

Originally Posted by Fi Skirata

Here is the newest update for my Threforian Raptors (in the Auggie's Bounty special slot):

I plan on submitting this to Auggies Sunday night, assuming their is nothing else that needs to be changed before then.

Looks good to me! I'm gonna go ahead and take down my priest and apply the changes that were suggested by the group.

[Fi Skirata]

Updated front page and removed the Copper Wyrmling.

[Fi Skirata]

Originally Posted by IshMEL

Bumping here to ask if anyone has feedback on Sigrid Ironwill:

Spoiler Alert!

SIGRID IRONWILL
Dwarf
Unique Hero
Warrior
Loyal
Medium 4
5 Life
Range 1
Attack 3
Defense 4
90 Points

FOEHAMMER OF THE BURNING FORGE
When Sigrid Ironwill attacks with a normal attack, she may attack two engaged figures if they are adjacent to both each other and to Sigrid Ironwill. Roll attack dice once for both figures. Each figure rolls defense dice separately.

CHANNEL ANCESTRAL STRENGTH
Once per round, before moving, you may roll the 20-sided die.
* If you roll 1-3, Sigrid Ironwill takes one wound and cannot move or attack this turn.
* If you roll 4-12, nothing happens.
* If you roll 13-18, all friendly dwarves within 6 spaces add 1 extra attack die for the remainder of the round.
* If you roll 18 or higher, all friendly dwarves within 6 spaces add 1 extra attack die and 1 extra defense die for the remainder of the round.
Sigrid Ironwill is affected by Channel Ancestral Strength.

Synergy Benefits Received

Axegrinders of Burning Forge: Dwarven Strategic Bonding:
As a Dwarf Hero, Sigrid Ironwill may benefit from the Axegrinders' DWARVEN STRATEGIC BONDING activation synergy.

Synergy Benefits Offered

Channel Ancestral Strength can effect all Dwarves: Migol Ironwill, The Axegrinders of Burning Forge, Mogrimm Forgehammer, Darrak Ambershard

BIO
Daughter of Migol, Sigrid Ironwill wields the Foehammer, which for a thousand years has protected the Burning Forge Clan. Her ferocity in battle (and her red hair) have earned her the name "Flame of the Forge" among her fellow dwarven warriors. With the Foehammer of the Burning Forge, she cleaves through enemies and can call on the spirits of the clan's ancestors to aid her fellow dwarves. But channelling the dead might cost Sigrid her life...

She's my first custom so I'm hoping to get some advice, especially on costing. Thanks!

I would say on the Foehammer of the Forge power that instead of:

"if they are adjacent to both each other and Sigrid Ironwill"

I would put in:

"if they are adjacent to each other"

This is because they would have to be adjacent to Sigrid in order to be engaged with her.

Edit: I am pulling down my raptors as I plan on submitting them to SoV

[IshMEL]

Originally Posted by Fi Skirata

I would say on the Foehammer of the Forge power that instead of:

"if they are adjacent to both each other and Sigrid Ironwill"

I would put in:

"if they are adjacent to each other"

This is because they would have to be adjacent to Sigrid in order to be engaged with her.

Thanks, that's a good catch. I'll make the change.

You can take down this entry if someone else needs feedback. Thanks!

[sixthflagbearer]

I would like to submit my Trihorn Behemoth.



The purpose I made it for was to make another hero for the arrow Gruts to bond with. He takes attacks, and will have a better chance of defending against them than any else of the beasts, or Gruts.

The mini is extremely available, Auggies has over 300 alone! It needs to go on a large peanut base.

Synergies received:

Beast Bonding (Arrow Gruts)

Synergies Offered:

Protective Instinct:
Krug
Swog Rider
Mimring
Ice Troll Berserker
Arrow Gruts

I hope I did this right .