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Old December 15th, 2009, 07:37 PM
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My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

I figured now would be a good time to start getting my work out there. This was my final project for my fiction writing class. It's actually the sequel to a story called Capitolium (which isn't yet completely polished), but it shouldn't be hard to follow without it. Please post comments/reactions.


IN HOPE AND IN HORROR

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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

I must ask, can you please put it in a spoiler so that we don't have to scroll so much? Thank you.

I'll read it shortly, if I can get the time.

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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

This is one of the best things I have read on here in quite some time.


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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

There we go.


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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

E-mail me this file so I can save it with the Capitolium file and read them both as one epic story...



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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

Capitolium needs some heavy polishing.


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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

I quite enjoyed it... I don't really see what's wrong with it. Some of the people I let read it really liked it as well. What don't you like about it?



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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

There's still a lot of trouble with the characterization. I'll IM you about it later.


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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

Okay. I still think the characterization was pretty solid, but I agree it could be better. I guess I'm the lazy writer out of the two of us who just throws his words on the paper and lets them sit there until he throws it away... Call me the Picasso of Writing.



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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

Nah, I spend a lot of time going back and rewriting. But in the meantime, I'll leave you with the musical stylings of Chris Griffin.


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Awsome, great job with the story.


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Re: My Fiction: In Hope and In Horror

I like the story. Very weel put together, and seems to have a hint of mystery and fanaticism about it.

The only problem I see (unless you meant it to be that way,) is that thier is too much dialogue. Other than that, it's good.

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