Fan Fic Contest: Are you the best writer?

[Bro-man]

Originally Posted by Son of Arathorn

Soon?

Just finished. What to you think?

[TrollBrute]

Tough judging here, I'd love to give you all first place, but then we wouldn't have a new prompt would we?

Third Place:

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Tornado. Yours was actually the story I enjoyed reading most. I loved the visuals with the Necros and the zombie scarecrows, very fun. I also loved the line "Only machines are eternal". Nicely done. There was a sort of eloquence (a bit of your poetic nature, I guess) to the narrative that seemed at odds with the more rural, uncultured setting. As well, I would have liked to have seen a bit more of a connection between the two parts. A very fun entry overall though, and you had me searching back through the thread for more of Eslo.

Second Place:

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Viegon. As above, I would have liked to see more of a direct line between the two parts. I kept expecting the Mother Forest's resistance to Kyntela saving Theracus to come into play later on. Solidly written though, and a very close second, you were just edged out by the winner. I liked the friendship between Kyntela and Theracus and would have liked to see more of that. Plus, you made me interested in Kyntela, which is a first.

First Place:

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SoA. Well written and the best use of the prompt. I love all the story possibilities the Essenweins provide and felt you made good use of them here. The interplay between Cyprien and Marcu was very interesting. My only real criticism would be that feels a little incomplete, a bit like a prologue as opposed to full story. That's minor, though, for this format. Very well done and a fun read.

Honorable Mention:

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Bro-man. Another well written story. Your action scenes -which I typically find less exciting in most prose work- were very well done and kept me entertained throughout. Very exciting. And underdog stories are always fun to read. As I said above I would have liked to give you all First Place.

Good writing all, judging was tough but fun.

[Son of Arathorn]

Awesome. I enjoyed writing for this prompt a lot, thanks for coming up with it TB.

On to the prompt:

One of the Alliance has overstepped their bounds. The other Valkyrie will not let this stand. An assassin has been dispatched by the Alliance to kill the arrogant Valkyrie. The guards are many, the walls are strong, but no matter. Failure is unacceptable.

[Bro-man]

Nice win SoA! I cant wait to try out your prompt!

Also Troll. In the story I was thinking the heros fight like somthing like a chinese fighters. In the chinese films, I think you would understand, but the heros are like super humans and can do incredible skills and stunts against many foes at once. That's what I tried to do with these heros, I could have add more but I didn't think of anything else at the moment.

One more thing. Is there anything that you like in it?

[Viegon]

Congratulations, SoA! And that's an interesting prompt. Hmm...

[TrollBrute]

Nice prompt SoA. I can already feel ideas bubbling and brewing in my head. Hopefully I have enough time this week to work on them.

[Tornado]

Grats SoA. I had a feeling you a solid grip on this one.
I am gad you enjoyed Eslo TB. I do have more stories if you are interested.
The beginning of the first story was re-written by a friend of mine (He actually created Eslo). He can be a bit heavy handed with descriptors at times and can let a sentence run a bit. (Not that I am better). I was going to edit it but I wanted to leave it as is( I really enjoy his style, he is a hell of a writer and poet). My original version has been lost to the ages.

Let me know and I can link you to my other Eslo tales and if you like him enough I will PM the stories my friend has written (they are much better).

Awesome prompt SoA. It will be hard to work Zombies into this one.

[superfrog]

Well, I got a jump start on this one, I wanted to get it done before I leave for Colorado on Saturday...

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PROLOGUE

"He has taken too much power, then. Are we agreed?" The moon glinted off the speaker's wings.
"Yes." A soft butterfly touch of a voice.
"Yes." This one strict and commanding.
"Yes." Regal and true.
"Then we are decided."

CHAPTER ONE: THREE PLANS AND A PROMISE

The lot had fallen to him. Einar knew that his forces would be the best of any general's at this task, but it required much extra thought, as well as taking the brunt of the blame if anything went wrong.
"Guards!"
An Imperium flitted towards him soundlessly.
"Bring me Shiori."
"I hear and obey."
Einar began to grow impatient. "Guards! Where is Shiori?"
"Here," came a smooth voice as Shiori slipped from beside Einar's traditional throne.
Unphased by his own oversight, Einar began detailing his plan to depose one of Valhalla's strongest rulers. Shiori nearly laughed with delight. In the story of Valhalla, she was set to become a major player, changing the course of the world for years to come.
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Jandar fumed in his tent. The other Valkyrie generals had left him a mostrous task, and he could not decide whom to trust in his own army to carry out the assignment.
He thought for over an hour until he struck upon a brilliant idea. He would do it himself.
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Theracus flew down to Ullar's camp with Kyntela Gwyn perched daintily atop. Upon arrival the elven princess dashed with uncharacteristic speed toward Ullar's tent, in which she could see two shadows. One was Ullar himself, judging by his height and monstrous wings. The other must have been an elf or human, and when he shifted his weight, Kyntela recognized Syvarris.
As Kyntela delivered her message, Ullar's expression changed from shock to a fierce determination. When she was finished, Ullar looked to the elven sharpshooter.
"I have ever trusted you, Syvarris. Will you take upon yourself the orders of the Alliance?"
"I always do my best, Lord Ullar, and this shall be no exception."
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Atop a hill, Thormun gazed at the stars, his nightly relaxation that faded slowly into placid sleep. As he drifted towards slumber, his mind suddenly became alert. Something felt most definitely wrong. Closing his eyes, he muttered to himself: "I will take care of this, whatever it is. I swear it on the wellsprings themselves."

CHAPTER TWO: FATEFUL JOURNEYS

Early in the morning, Jandar awoke. He had not bothered to tell his army that he was leaving. Drake would take care of things while he was away.
He struck out toward the camp that housed the Valkyrie he needed to see. The Alliance had left him no choice. Upon arrival, he flew directly up to the general, on of the seven most powerful beings in the world, and offered his hand in greeting. Jandar was more tricky than many of the creatures he had summoned. This meeting was not for the kill. That could wait. Jandar needed to establish an intimate trust with his fellow Valkyrie.
Several hours later, his mission accomplished, Jandar returned home.
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Syvarris coughed as he climbed the mountain that sat between Ullar's camp and his target. The air was getting thinner and the climbing steeper. He gritted his teeth and pushed forward. As he crested the mountain, he caught his first glimpse of the enemy camp. In the half-light before dawn, it looked dark and sinister. But the mission could not fail. Syvarris drew his bow and took aim.
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Thormun put on his cloak, a futile attempt to hide his identity from prying eyes. His journey was to take him to Jandar's camp, to the leader of the Alliance. Somehow, he knew that he would get to the root of the problem that had been plaguing him before the day was through.
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Shiori arrived at her destination much earlier than any but she had expected. Getting through guards and walls were small details, easily dealt with. She now crouched behind the tent that housed her target. Shiori heard voices, and she hesitated. She did not need to rush, though. For now, she could wait.

CHAPTER THREE: FOUR PATHS CONVERGED...

Thormun stood before Jandar. "What is happening?" he demanded, stern but inwardly concerned.
Jandar started to answer, but closed his mouth. He had no words to answer Thormun.
Shiori saw her opening. She leapt forward, only to discover that she was being held down by two of Jandar's Sentinels. She couldn't even struggle, and within a few seconds lay prone on the ground.
Syvarris loosed his first arrow toward Jandar's tent. It landed ten yards shy of its target. He drew another arrow and pulled back his bow for a second shot. This time, he was confident that he could hit his target. He could see the shadows of two figures in the tent, and he drew his bow back farther, aiming for the farther one. Before he could release his arrow, though, he was laid out flat by two Sentinels, his arrow soarind harmlessly skyward.
Hearing the commotion, Thormun looked around, confused. Suddenly it became clear to him. Jandar was causing these problems, seeking power that was not his to take. Thormun's hammer came down one last time, destroying Valhalla's first champion.

EPILOGUE

When Vydar had called a meeting with Aquilla, Einar, and Ullar a few days prior and arranged for Ullar and Einar both to send assassins, it had been part of his quest to rise to power.
Jandar had grown increasingly distant from the Alliance until he felt forced to try something new. In desperation, he started plotting to take control of Utgar's forces as well as his own. Vydar had seized this opportunity to turn the Alliance against itself. Shiori had been slain, and Einar was outraged. Syvarris, the proud elf, had failed, bringing shame and a desire for vengeance to ullar's forces. Vydar himself had no desire to stay untied with Aquilla.
In the War of Valhalla, a new chapter had begun. Each general fought alone.

[ZAKOVANI]

I've been absent more frequently this summer (ironic, right?) but I will see if I can throw together an entry... Good job to everyone on te ones when I was gone, too!

[Son of Arathorn]

Aaand superfrog is waaay out in front. C'mon guys, I'd like some competition here. Nothing for me to do now but wait.

[TrollBrute]

Sorry, I had some ideas but I'm not sure I'll make this one. It's been busy lately and I haven't even gotten started. If I have some free time this weekend I might throw something together but no promises. It's a shame too, to waste a good prompt.

[RealistWriter]

Uh, hi. I'm pretty new here and would like to know how to enter. I'm currently doing a fanfic on deviantART and thought that this would be a cool place to share them and create new ones. I'm up for this contest! Where should I post the chapter once I'm done?