The B.I.V.
July 25th, 2009, 01:46 PM
Here are the final five. I was hoping for 6 but no one broke out of the pack to take sixth place. It's down to Utgar, Vydar and Ullar! So here they are. Vote often and early! (Okay, you're only allowed one vote but I just wanted to say that).
Kiroset charged through the line of Elven Warriors. Letting out a bloodthirsty howl, he tears tore into the foe, opening up a long gash in his side. Suddenly, wolves begian to pour from the forest surrounding the Elven Caravan, as they responded to Kiroset's Howl. As they charged through, Kiroset became more dangerous, working in unison with his fellow Hunters. Then, suddenly, the carnage ended, and Kiroset approached the central cart, the one that was supposed to hold the Dire Stone. Instantly, a horn sounded, and Elven Warriors charged from the surrounding Forest, Chardris with them. Chardris sent(?) a Fireball at Kiroset, but he was gone, vanished from Feylund.
Bio Score:7 It changed tense back and forth a couple of times, but otherwise not bad.
Card Score:8 (5 +3)
Total Score:15
http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll211/TheBIV1/Kiroset-2.png
In the year 2209, the world was a jumble of warring factions. When an agent named Morgan, one of the top mechanics and programmers in his army, had his arms mangled in a firefight, he was brought back to his base in critical condition. Scientists, experimenting with a new technology and racing against the clock to save his life, grafted metal arms onto his shoulders, adding large shoulder plates to protect his head and modifying his DNA to strengthen him, enabling him to carry the increased weight. Thus, Earth's first Cyborg was born.
Morgan CIPHER, (Cybernetic Individual Programmed for Hazardous Exploration and Repair) spends hours tinkering with his own metal arms, constantly updating them. His years building things is paying off now, enabling him to use scrap metal to repair himself and other metal beings, such as robots and other cyborgs, and now, in Valhalla, Soulborgs.
Bio Score:10 Solid!
Card Score:5 (3+2)
Total:15 http://www.heroscapers.com/community/gallery/files/1/4/1/0/morgan_cipher_276100_original.png
It was decision day at the Aubrien Archer camp in Feylund's capital. Every student was nervous, but the Lach-nar triplets felt that they had nothing to worry about. For they had proven themselves to be quite accomplished archers and very accurate shots. The booming voice of the Headmaster sounded across all of the grounds while his booming voice said.: "What a beautiful day in Feylund. Today, some of you will move on to join the elite..... THE AUBRIEN ARCHERS!". An applause rose from the crowd as the headmaster continued, "Sadly, not all of you here today can become one of them. We will only be accepting a couple of you." A silence in the crowd allowed the headmaster to continue "And so, here are the ones to be admitted:". He paused,. the Lach-nar triplets expected to hear all of their names called ,for they had been praised for their excellent marksmanship in their village. The names went (?), and none of the Lach-nar triplets were called.
Overcome with anger, they betrayed the Aubrien Archers and went to seek their revenge. One day, while the triplets were laying down to rest in the middle of a remote forest, a white light came(?) to them. When the light ceased, they saw the General Utgar, staring back at them.
He was the epitome of evil and swore that he would help the Lach-nar triplets get their revenge upon the elves of Feylund. While on Valhalla, the Lach-nar triplets soon became the Lach-nar Elves and perfected their marksmanship past even the standards of the Aubrien Archers. Their name is now the most feared among the elves of Ullar.
Bio Score:7
Card Score:10 (7+3)
Total Score:17
http://i146.photobucket.com/albums/r253/Firemaster_M/Heroscape%20Cards/Lach-Narcard.png
Mimring is flying through the forest close to the ground in pursuit of a Vydar raiding party, when he smells new machines.
He slows his flight and he comes aupon a tiny robot that seems to be stuck to the ground. Laughing to himself he decides that he will come back for it. A little while later comes he comes to another.
Mimring flyies back to the second mine a little beat up from the battle. He walks up and prepares to smash mthe machine when it pulls out a gun and starts to shoot at him. Mimring rears back and flames erupt from his jaws onto the mine. After a particurlary long and hot jet of flames he stops. The mine looks back up at him and starts to shoot again. This time Mimring steps forward and crushes the mine. Immediately after it is destroyed a high pitched squeal comes from the ground, causing Mimring to fall to the ground in pain. Then there is a chuckle from the trees and a Jandar scout says. "Wow those Claymores sure do work." Just as Mimring goes to torch him he runs off towards his camp.
Mimring flys straight to Utgar, all but dead, and dielivers him the message to him. Vydar has some new machines. They are called, Claymores.
Bio Score: 6
Card score: 6 (5 +1)
Total Score: 12
http://i146.photobucket.com/albums/r253/Firemaster_M/Heroscape%20Cards/ClaymoresCard.png
Many centuries before the elves of Feylund had found refuge among the Wayland trees at the base of the mountain Llomvar, the commanding centaur champion, Ashra, crafted a powerful magic artifact, the Dire Stone, and lead the remnants of the elven nation to a decisive victory over the forces of the Darklord Aapep.
With the safety of the fledgling elven survivors assured, Ashra parted ways; gifting the Dire Stone and prophesying to return at the time of the elves' greatest need.
In memory of Ashra's heroic endeavors, the city was named after him and an epigraph was carved into the base of the largest of the Wayland trees in the center of the elven city. The inscription foretells of a time when the greatest of Feylund's heroes would return to repel the tides of darkness.
Long have the elves weathered their enemies' barbs, waiting for the triumphant return of their majestic city's namesake but now with the strange disappearance of The Nine, many have begaun to wonder if the promise of Ashra's return has been taken from them as well...
Bio score:9 Excellent! I especially like the Darklord's name (nice touch).
Card Score:9 (7+2)
Total Score:18
http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll211/TheBIV1/ashra2-1.jpg
Kiroset charged through the line of Elven Warriors. Letting out a bloodthirsty howl, he tears tore into the foe, opening up a long gash in his side. Suddenly, wolves begian to pour from the forest surrounding the Elven Caravan, as they responded to Kiroset's Howl. As they charged through, Kiroset became more dangerous, working in unison with his fellow Hunters. Then, suddenly, the carnage ended, and Kiroset approached the central cart, the one that was supposed to hold the Dire Stone. Instantly, a horn sounded, and Elven Warriors charged from the surrounding Forest, Chardris with them. Chardris sent(?) a Fireball at Kiroset, but he was gone, vanished from Feylund.
Bio Score:7 It changed tense back and forth a couple of times, but otherwise not bad.
Card Score:8 (5 +3)
Total Score:15
http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll211/TheBIV1/Kiroset-2.png
In the year 2209, the world was a jumble of warring factions. When an agent named Morgan, one of the top mechanics and programmers in his army, had his arms mangled in a firefight, he was brought back to his base in critical condition. Scientists, experimenting with a new technology and racing against the clock to save his life, grafted metal arms onto his shoulders, adding large shoulder plates to protect his head and modifying his DNA to strengthen him, enabling him to carry the increased weight. Thus, Earth's first Cyborg was born.
Morgan CIPHER, (Cybernetic Individual Programmed for Hazardous Exploration and Repair) spends hours tinkering with his own metal arms, constantly updating them. His years building things is paying off now, enabling him to use scrap metal to repair himself and other metal beings, such as robots and other cyborgs, and now, in Valhalla, Soulborgs.
Bio Score:10 Solid!
Card Score:5 (3+2)
Total:15 http://www.heroscapers.com/community/gallery/files/1/4/1/0/morgan_cipher_276100_original.png
It was decision day at the Aubrien Archer camp in Feylund's capital. Every student was nervous, but the Lach-nar triplets felt that they had nothing to worry about. For they had proven themselves to be quite accomplished archers and very accurate shots. The booming voice of the Headmaster sounded across all of the grounds while his booming voice said.: "What a beautiful day in Feylund. Today, some of you will move on to join the elite..... THE AUBRIEN ARCHERS!". An applause rose from the crowd as the headmaster continued, "Sadly, not all of you here today can become one of them. We will only be accepting a couple of you." A silence in the crowd allowed the headmaster to continue "And so, here are the ones to be admitted:". He paused,. the Lach-nar triplets expected to hear all of their names called ,for they had been praised for their excellent marksmanship in their village. The names went (?), and none of the Lach-nar triplets were called.
Overcome with anger, they betrayed the Aubrien Archers and went to seek their revenge. One day, while the triplets were laying down to rest in the middle of a remote forest, a white light came(?) to them. When the light ceased, they saw the General Utgar, staring back at them.
He was the epitome of evil and swore that he would help the Lach-nar triplets get their revenge upon the elves of Feylund. While on Valhalla, the Lach-nar triplets soon became the Lach-nar Elves and perfected their marksmanship past even the standards of the Aubrien Archers. Their name is now the most feared among the elves of Ullar.
Bio Score:7
Card Score:10 (7+3)
Total Score:17
http://i146.photobucket.com/albums/r253/Firemaster_M/Heroscape%20Cards/Lach-Narcard.png
Mimring is flying through the forest close to the ground in pursuit of a Vydar raiding party, when he smells new machines.
He slows his flight and he comes aupon a tiny robot that seems to be stuck to the ground. Laughing to himself he decides that he will come back for it. A little while later comes he comes to another.
Mimring flyies back to the second mine a little beat up from the battle. He walks up and prepares to smash mthe machine when it pulls out a gun and starts to shoot at him. Mimring rears back and flames erupt from his jaws onto the mine. After a particurlary long and hot jet of flames he stops. The mine looks back up at him and starts to shoot again. This time Mimring steps forward and crushes the mine. Immediately after it is destroyed a high pitched squeal comes from the ground, causing Mimring to fall to the ground in pain. Then there is a chuckle from the trees and a Jandar scout says. "Wow those Claymores sure do work." Just as Mimring goes to torch him he runs off towards his camp.
Mimring flys straight to Utgar, all but dead, and dielivers him the message to him. Vydar has some new machines. They are called, Claymores.
Bio Score: 6
Card score: 6 (5 +1)
Total Score: 12
http://i146.photobucket.com/albums/r253/Firemaster_M/Heroscape%20Cards/ClaymoresCard.png
Many centuries before the elves of Feylund had found refuge among the Wayland trees at the base of the mountain Llomvar, the commanding centaur champion, Ashra, crafted a powerful magic artifact, the Dire Stone, and lead the remnants of the elven nation to a decisive victory over the forces of the Darklord Aapep.
With the safety of the fledgling elven survivors assured, Ashra parted ways; gifting the Dire Stone and prophesying to return at the time of the elves' greatest need.
In memory of Ashra's heroic endeavors, the city was named after him and an epigraph was carved into the base of the largest of the Wayland trees in the center of the elven city. The inscription foretells of a time when the greatest of Feylund's heroes would return to repel the tides of darkness.
Long have the elves weathered their enemies' barbs, waiting for the triumphant return of their majestic city's namesake but now with the strange disappearance of The Nine, many have begaun to wonder if the promise of Ashra's return has been taken from them as well...
Bio score:9 Excellent! I especially like the Darklord's name (nice touch).
Card Score:9 (7+2)
Total Score:18
http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll211/TheBIV1/ashra2-1.jpg