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Nightmare
July 30th, 2006, 09:12 PM
CHAPTER 1: A NEAR-DEATH EXPERIENCE
He trudged slowly through the snow, wind slashing at his cheeks, his black hair blowing in whisps as he searched. He brushed it out of his eyes and pulled down his goggles, hoping that the frost was now off of the lenses. He pressed a button, activating the thermal imagery. He had to find her.
He glanced out over the lake, the vast, frozen over lake.
And then he saw her.
Her small body came out as a bright orange and red over the vast purple that was the lake. He turned off the thermal imagery and cautiously approached the lake.
She hadn't come home yet. And it was only going to get colder.
The chilled winds of this planet, Anarcitor, blew harder and harder as the day progressed, making it colder. He had to get his sister home. Otherwise he, and she, would die out here. And, most unfortunately, they were miles from home.
He took one step, and then another. Something in the corner of his eye blared, and he heard an explosion. He slipped, and scrambled as his body weight smacked into the ice. Several hairline cracks emerged from beneath him. He crawled carefully away, and then stepped to his feet.
"What was that?" he said out loud. He shrugged and moved farther out onto the ice, moving cautiously.
Soon he could see her in detail.
"Aren, come on! It's getting late! It'll be too cold to live soon!"
She didn't say anything.
"Aren, come on!"
She screamed, high pitched, blood curdling scream, finger pointed outward and past him.
He spun around, and he froze in place.
A huge, white cat with long sharp fangs stood three feet away, and atop the beast was a blue creature with a dome like head, and a sharp sword. His mouth was curled in a snarl.
And then the white cat pounced, and he ran, the creature smacking behind him. Once again he froze.
"Victor!" cried his sister. He turned around. Cracks as thick as his fists were flying under his feet, surrounding his sister.
The entire lake was breaking apart.
He ran as fast as he could to his sister, grabbing her and leaping just as the ice that had been beneath her shattered and sank beneath the water.
He picked her up and stepped carefully from glacier to glacier, balancing.
And then the white cat had leapt yet again, smacking into them.
Victor felt the icy cold of the water smacking into him, and then he could hardly breathe. Sharp blades of pain stabbed at him all over his body, and he could hear Aren's muffled screaming.
Victor's head was hurting terribly... he was going to black out.
And then he could see the white cat and the blue man and a white light above him... and an angel reached out for him just as his eyes closed, and the world went dark.

Su-Bak-Na
July 30th, 2006, 09:30 PM
Nice I'km eager to hear the rest I think I know what the "angel" is, and I know what the white cat and blue man are as well. i wont spoil it if som one here can't figure it out. :P

player_of_volleyball
July 30th, 2006, 10:33 PM
yea same here, cant wait to read more, and i to kno who it is

feekonea
August 2nd, 2006, 02:01 AM
At first I was like what the heck, Is this even about heroscape? But now I realize that that angelmight be Jandar or someone, good story so far. Keep it up.

Nightmare
August 3rd, 2006, 02:01 PM
Thanks all for your wonderful comments. Here's the next part:

CHAPTER 2: AWAKENING
He awoke in the darkness, pain surging through his skull. He was chilled to the bone, his clothes sticking to his body. He saw a torch nearby and stood next to its warmth.
"Aren?" called Victor, into the darkness.
She walked over to him, staring blankly at her new surroundings.
"Where are we?" asked Aren, dread heightening the pitch of her voice.
"I don't know... are you alright?"
"I think so. But I'm not sure. I'm just really cold."
He took off his jacket. Being ten years older than she was gave him a strange, personal responsibility to ensure her safety.
"Come on."
They walked several feet until they came to a door. Victor pushed on it, and it screeched open. Before him was a huge chamber, with torches casting dark shadows and possible forebodings of the times to come. A huge man, an angel, stood in the center of this room, and he smiled.
"Welcome, Victor, to Valhalla."
"Wait... Valhalla...? Are we... dead?"
"Far from it. I rescued you from that fate several hours ago."
"I thank you. What is your name?"
"I am Jandar."
"Thank you for saving us, Jandar. I think we are able to go back now."
"Forgive me, but it is not that simple. You see, I only know how to retrieve heroes and armies from other worlds. But I don't know how to send them back."
Victor laughed. "Oh, this is perfect then. Why are we here?"
"Well... you aren't really supposed to be."
"Then why in God's name am I here?"
"Somehow Utgar learned how to-"
"Wait... who's Utgar?"
"Perhaps I should tell you the whole story?"
"Well, if you can't send me back... you might as well go right ahead and do that."
"Well, it all began when one of the Kyrie, named Thormun, drank from a pool of water. It was much different from any other pool of water, however. It was a wellspring. It made his wings grow larger than ever before, and he felt power surge through him. And then he told the other Kyrie. Five of us sought the Wellspring's powers... myself, Utgar, Vydar, Ullar, and Einar. We all drank from the waters, and began having visions of huge armies, and soon Utgar had allied himself with Einar and Vydar, and he wanted the wellsprings for himself. And so we all discovered that we could open time rifts and bring in heroes and armies to fight for the wellsprings. Thormun never forgave himself for discovering the waters. He joined me to stop Utgar's forces."
"So where do I come in?"
"One night, all of us had a dream about a hero in a white and black mask with long black hair who was nearly immortal. All five of us realized we needed this hero. All except for Utgar, who knew that if any of us got to him, his plans would be ruined. And so he sent one of his minions, an Orc named Nerak, through the time rift to kill that hero before he became the hero. That hero... is you, Victor."
Victor's lip curled up in disgust. "You brought my sister here, to watch people die in a war? And you said you couldn't send people back. How come Utgab or whatever his name is could send the blue man back?"
"I don't know. But now that you are here, perhaps could you start your training?"
Victor laughed. "You think that by saving my life, and dragging my five year old sister and I into a war, that I'll die for you? Well you've got another thing coming to you, you crazy winged bastard. I'll be back in that pitifully cold room you stuck us in. Good night."
He spun around, holding Aren's tiny hands, hoping that her innocence would somehow stay unscathed by the coming storm.

player_of_volleyball
August 3rd, 2006, 02:44 PM
getting better by every post. Keep them coming!!!!

feekonea
August 3rd, 2006, 07:09 PM
getting better by every post. Keep them coming!!!!

ditto.

Nightmare
August 4th, 2006, 09:26 AM
getting better by every post. Keep them coming!!!!
Thank you very much. I'm going with my mom to her work today, because my house has no A/C and I hate heat and smelling bad and stuff like that... anyway, I'll type it up there. I know exactly how this is going to end and everything, and I bet you guys will like it. :D